my first song, need honest opinion :
Blinded By Love
How could I have been so dumb?
To think I was your only one
The facts were there I couldnt see
all of this time you were just playing me
(Hook)
You told me you loved me
You fed me lies
You said to me youd be there for me
cant help these tears ive cried
I thought you were my angel sent from above
But all this time I was blinded by love
Verse 2
How could I think it was meant to be?
What was then is now a memory
moments of happiness feeling confused
Our time spent together was misused
(Hook)
(Bridge)
When we first got together you promised me youd never
Let another girl take my place
I thought you were my type of guy its time for me to say goodbye
To all the grief and pain youve caused press play to the life ive paused
(Hook)
(Hook)
you told me u loved me
you fed me lies
you said to me youd be there for me but now i find
that you werent my angel sent from above
now I see cleary, no longer blinded by love
2006-07-31 16:40:47 · 16 answers · asked by Nicole 4 in Entertainment & Music ➔ Music
I love it. If there's anything I'd change it would be the line or words that reads "you said to me you'd be there for me". That part sounds too redundant of something. Maybe change it to " you said you'd always be there for me but now I find" or "you said you'd never leave me but now I find" (just some ideas). And in the last line I think you meant to type the word "clearly" instead of "cleary". Other than that I think it's great. It shows a depth of emotion that is lacking in most songs today.
2006-07-31 16:53:12 · answer #1 · answered by Rena 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
This sounds really good! It has a lot of meaning to it. I would leave it just the way it is. If you haven't already, record it and send it to different music publishers. Good luck to you... and keep writing/singing!
2006-07-31 16:48:42 · answer #2 · answered by countrysoldier85 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
well its hard to judge a song without the music...since it it the one who really makes a song good or bad. i like it...ive writen plenty of songs and have a little experience, i say that if you choose the right music to it it could be awsome....nice words and expressions..keep up u might get somewhere
2006-07-31 16:46:41 · answer #3 · answered by groovybubs 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
OK ladies......it's party time!!!!! God, I can see the swarm of them, like a big brother looking to escape his house being invaded by his sister's swarm of friends for a long sleepover night!!!!
I'm outta here!!!!
2006-07-31 16:45:54 · answer #4 · answered by Mr. Wizard 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I think that this song rocks and should be sold on a cd.
2006-08-01 17:02:08 · answer #5 · answered by ? 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
very good but if its a sentimental pop song, then its been done to death. try dance beat or raggee. maybe even rock. good luck
very good lyrics.
2006-07-31 16:57:54 · answer #6 · answered by santosh s 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Girl!!! you have talent, keep up the beautiful song writing because it's your gift!!!
2006-07-31 16:47:43 · answer #7 · answered by sunshine25 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
thats actually pretty hot im not even lyin i write a bit of songs my self r&b
2006-07-31 16:46:08 · answer #8 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
They're alright. If you are serious about them I wouldn't have them posted here unless you got copywrites on them.
2006-07-31 16:44:51 · answer #9 · answered by Drayton 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
have you copyrighted it? if not, maybe somebody here has already stolen your work. For lovers, It's real good.
Congrats.
2006-07-31 16:49:18 · answer #10 · answered by Tudor_ 22 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋