i dont want you here no more When you open that door i'll say bye bye bye for little time ill be happy but after that little time ill be madd that you left bye bye bye all the midnight promises i see you with another guy that makes me sad i got one thing to say to ya gurl bye bye bye i got nin hearts 7 of them got hut cuz of you will you see the life you suck out of me i got words for ya gurl bye bye bye you hurt me with your lies why you cant tell the truth dirty little lier did you hear the word truth i got words bye bye bye this must sound crazy but i love you i know i cant say no more i want to see you walk to the dor just hit me with the truth bye bye bye bye bye bye bye
2006-07-31 12:32:55 · 25 answers · asked by tylergravelle@myspace.com 1 in Entertainment & Music ➔ Music
have you noticed that the - "!" - symbol next to the tab "discover" at the top right corner of the this website looks like a dong?
2006-07-31 12:34:40 · answer #1 · answered by HazMatDG 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Words are 'ok' - could really use some work to solidify the structure of the song. I think you could probably provide a little more 'info' into the 'hurt' caused (other than the obvious that she cheated) For example - elaborate on the the "lie" (dirty little liar- strong lyric). Did she 'say' something? Did she 'do" something that she was "caught" in a lie - reveal a little more. Now - as a singer/songwriter I have to tell you - I'd be very careful placing my words 'out there for the whole world to see" . You have to be careful and protect your music. What if this was the number one greatest hit for 'someone else' and you didn't get credit because you allowed 'all eyes' to view in this forum? Just a thought. I was always taught that you protect your lyrics. Keep them close to your heart. If you are writing other songs - good luck. This is a good start - but be sure that your songs 'tell a story' even if you don't reveal everything - it has to have a beginning, middle and end.
2006-07-31 19:41:35 · answer #2 · answered by THE SINGER 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Not very good. it doesn't flow; it's kind of all over the place. it sounds like you want to be N'Sync
-want to see you walk to the dor( just hit me with the truth) bye bye bye bye bye bye bye
2006-07-31 19:45:26 · answer #3 · answered by andiez07 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
o my god Haz Mat DG is right! lmao
but about the lyrics--are they a joke? sounds a little familiar... maybe it's supposed to be rapped?
if not work on that neglish.
i'm sorry- the truth hurts man.
no offense
2006-07-31 19:39:20 · answer #4 · answered by Erica 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Reminds me of the Backstreet Boys. Not a good thing.
2006-07-31 19:35:27 · answer #5 · answered by cindersphere 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It sounds like it was written by an 11 year old who can't spell, use proper grammar or use punctuation.
Did I mention.............. I didn't read your lyrics.
2006-07-31 19:36:53 · answer #6 · answered by beekiss 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
wow... that is really cool! i am so totally impressed! i wish my boyfriend was a sokng writer! its so romantic!;) good luck to you, and youll find the girl of ur life with makin your own lyrics! good work! LUVIES!
2006-07-31 19:36:46 · answer #7 · answered by Lexi 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I think they suck and you sound like a sappy kid that will most likely damage himself and others.
Also your spelling is really bad.
2006-07-31 19:36:12 · answer #8 · answered by austinguurl 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
i think their awesome!
its so cool that u can just sit down and write like that and express how u feel!
well keep it up and u could make an album!
2006-07-31 19:36:59 · answer #9 · answered by skippy 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
MAybe we need the music for this, because it reminds me of N*Sync and I never liked N*Sync
2006-07-31 19:39:36 · answer #10 · answered by Justcurious 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋