I don't know.
I don't care.
Shut up,
I'm thinking...
but it's all a blare.
The fog is invading the window,
like you're invading my life.
I can't believe I thought,
that I could be your wife.
I ask myself if this is even worth living.
Stop laughing,
I'm not kidding!
Is this wrong?
Is this right?
Falling into in-human sight.
I feel more safe here,
when you're nowhere near.
Get out of my life,
and bring with you all of the humiliation and strife.
Go ahead,
lock me up as if I were an animal.
You can try it,
but I'm un-managable.
Ask the day turns to nightfall,
the moon sheds a tear on me,
which turns into rainfall,
tamely as can be.
In armed combat,
with a one man army
You're blinded by my abomination
so you cannot see.
Good luck, I still won't quit
The reason for why I wait here,
so you can take a punch at it.
I'm not afraid,
I will not cry.
and one more thing,
I hope you die.
2006-07-30 18:46:11 · 6 answers · asked by Anonymous in Education & Reference ➔ Words & Wordplay
nahhh, i'm not emo lol. i just felt like writing about stuff like that
2006-07-30 18:57:49 · update #1
I like the fog part of your poem and how you compare it to the guy that is invading your life....
Fog can cover up the light and make it impossible to see, and that is exactly what this person did to you. Not only that but it can suddenly happen...and quietly, like on little cats feet.
You are resisting him...and in doing so, he is losing power and influence over you.
What you have is a powerful tool that reminds you of the decision you have made to get him out of your life, despite his protests....you are now "armed in combat" you know the enemy and are stronger for it.
Good writing. Excellent job.
Keep it up, don't stop.
This is your gift...to yourself and others that are going through similar situations but lack the words to put their feelings onto paper.
BRAVO!
2006-07-30 18:57:47 · answer #1 · answered by Dave 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Thats really good. I'd be interested to hear how honest you could be if you didn't worry about making it rhyme.
2006-07-30 18:51:01 · answer #2 · answered by milo.3600 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It's mediocre - there's nothing original to it.
It just sounds like teen angst.
2006-07-30 18:49:54 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Wow... that's kinda...
ok, I'm not gonna be insulting, but dude, that's kinda emo.
Just my honest opinion.
2006-07-30 18:49:55 · answer #4 · answered by Arsh 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It's a very dark poem. Are you sad?
2006-07-30 18:49:55 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Little to llong for me. But it was good.Pem
2006-07-30 19:03:48 · answer #6 · answered by Patricia M 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋