She's slipping through the cracks of sanity
Her mind racing with each epiphany.
She thinks too hard about the life that she leads.
She has too many problems, too many needs.
When she trips she falls all the way.
Her soul is left in a state of decay.
Her heart keeps breaking though she's never found love
Her state of mind is so hard to let go of.
With a certainty that she can't place
She knows she'll never recieve joy's embrace.
Heaven seems so far away.
As she tries to keep her demons at bay.
She's a normal girl with a smiling face
Who's caught up in the devil's chase.
2006-07-30 16:57:36 · 8 answers · asked by PeacefulThunder 2 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Other - Arts & Humanities
it's sad, but good. deals with some big emotions i like it
2006-07-30 17:03:11 · answer #1 · answered by momoftrl 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I loved the content and flow though it may have been better in free form than rhyme.
2006-07-31 00:16:42 · answer #2 · answered by Kiss my Putt! 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
A few of the lines could be refined a little ,Other than that I thought it was very good
2006-07-31 00:04:46 · answer #3 · answered by jim d 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
the mind creates the insanity- the devil is the mind
it's about the struggle between true consciousness, and the mind
you are waking up....keep going, keep questioning, searching...
*peace
heaven is now~here or no~where?
2006-07-31 00:26:18 · answer #4 · answered by zentrinity 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Its a song about depression. Brink of suicide depression, but the person is trying to hide it. Emo's would probably listen to it.
2006-07-31 00:02:07 · answer #5 · answered by guyfromcroswell 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
interesting
try rewriting it without rhyming as the rhymes make it a little clumsy
2006-07-31 00:02:29 · answer #6 · answered by Ivanhoe Fats 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
she her she she she she she her her she her she she she she she
Need to find another word, or edit it down better.
2006-07-31 00:22:59 · answer #7 · answered by ? 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
bad...really bad.
2006-07-31 00:01:21 · answer #8 · answered by Lola P 6 · 0⤊ 1⤋