When she trips she falls all the way
Her senses are left in a state of decay
OR
When she trips she falls all the way
Her consciousness left in a state of decay
OR
When she trips she falls all the way
Her soul is left in a state of decay
2006-07-30 16:15:47 · 14 answers · asked by PeacefulThunder 2 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Other - Arts & Humanities
It's a poem it's not song lyrics. I'd love for it to be a song, but I know absolutely nothing about music.
2006-07-30 16:25:38 · update #1
When she trips she falls all the way
Her soul is left in a state of decay
LOVE THAT 1
GIMME THE 10 POINTS I SAID IT FIRST
LOL MEMEMEME
2006-07-30 16:19:09 · answer #1 · answered by WHOO??? 1 · 0⤊ 1⤋
When she trips she falls all the way
Her senses are left in a state of decay
2006-07-30 23:21:18 · answer #2 · answered by David 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
When she trips she falls all the way
Her senses are left in a state of decay
2006-07-30 23:19:51 · answer #3 · answered by Violet UK 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
When she trips she falls all the way
Her soul is left in state of decay
2006-07-30 23:21:07 · answer #4 · answered by Michael J with wings 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
When she trips she falls all the way
Her soul is left in a state of decay
Its cool;)
2006-07-30 23:20:09 · answer #5 · answered by HELP! 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
To me the 3rd one sound very good When she trips she falls all the way
Her soul is left in a state of decay !!
this one is very true!!!!!
2006-07-30 23:19:54 · answer #6 · answered by Val 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
When she trips, FALLING all the way
Her counciousness left in decay.
Sounds better than any of the above.
However IF I had to choose I would say probably the 2nd choice but I still think probably it needs more editing.
Song lyric? or just a poem?
2006-07-30 23:21:35 · answer #7 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
oooo are you a song writer or just a poet, well any way i think the one with the soul sounds better. i like it, it sounds cool
2006-07-30 23:20:12 · answer #8 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
I like the 2nd one (consciousness)
2006-07-30 23:19:35 · answer #9 · answered by Michele F 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
i have to say the one with her senses sounds better hope it helps you out good luck
2006-07-30 23:20:14 · answer #10 · answered by christy b 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋