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which sentence is better?
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In the true spirit of Thanksgiving we ask that you share the many blessings you will enjoy this Thanksgiving Day by simply purchasing these wonderful holiday greeting cards.
Please share the many blessings you will enjoy on Thanksgiving Day. We would like to ask your help in raising money for our annual Thanksgiving Day dinner by simply purchasing these wonderful holiday greeting cards.
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which ones i should pick?
Keeping (to/with) tradition, Buckeye Bread Basket, a nonprofit organization, would like to assist our community this year by hosting its Annual Thanksgiving Day dinner for the (needy/needy people).
2006-07-30 09:58:53 · 21 answers · asked by ckpklktk 1 in Education & Reference ➔ Homework Help
#2..it seems more asking and less pushy. In particular I don't like the phrase "In the true spirit of...", but this may just be me. And if it were me I would take out the "simply" in "simply purchasing"--I don't think it does any good.
2006-07-30 10:04:40 · answer #1 · answered by miestersean 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
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2006-07-30 17:00:58 · answer #2 · answered by ? 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
We all give thanks in different ways. What makes Thanksgiving truely special, is our ability to pass on and share the blessings we have in our lives, hearts, and minds. However, those less fortunate don't always have the luxury of such blessings. With this in mind, we ask for your support this Thanksgiving by helping Buckeye Bread Basket fund our Annual Thanksgiving Day dinner. This Annual dinner is simply not possible with out you. A donation (of $) will touch the lives of so many in our community and reward you with these wonderful greetings cards to share blessings throughout the year. Regardless of your choice, we wish you a happy and safe holiday.
2006-07-30 17:37:15 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
# 1 but modified this way...
In the true spirit of Thanksgiving we ask that you share the many blessings you will enjoy by asking your help in raising money for our annual Thanksgiving Day dinner. Simply by purchasing these wonderful holiday greeting cards.
2006-07-30 17:07:31 · answer #4 · answered by razbora03 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
In the true spirit of Thanksgiving, we ask that you help others enjoy the blessings of this Thanksgiving day by purchasing these lovely holiday cards; all proceeds will go to funding our Annual Thanksgiving Day dinner for the needy.
2006-07-30 17:04:53 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
I say
In the true spirit of Thanksgiving we ask that you share the many blessings you will enjoy this Thanksgiving Day by simply purchasing these wonderful holiday greeting cards.
2006-07-30 17:00:32 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
i'd pick
Please share the many blessings you will enjoy on Thanksgiving Day. We would like to ask your help in raising money for our annual Thanksgiving Day dinner by simply purchasing these wonderful holiday greeting cards.
it sounds better
2006-07-30 17:01:45 · answer #7 · answered by christina s 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
"In the true spirit of Thanksgiving we ask that you share the many blessings you will enjoy this Thanksgiving Day by simply purchasing these wonderful holiday greeting cards."
Shorter & straight to the point.
2006-07-30 17:01:38 · answer #8 · answered by canguroargentino 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
In the first category, the second sentence is much better, it's more polite. I would leave out the word "simply", it doesn't sound right. Perhaps "kindly" would work better.
In the second part, "keeping with tradition", and "needy". Needy people sounds like people that need a lot of attention, like in "I always get into relationships with needy people."
You sound like a very organized person if you are getting ready for Thanksgiving already!
2006-07-30 17:05:09 · answer #9 · answered by ♪ ♫ ☮ NYbron ☮ ♪ ♫ 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
"In the true spirit of Thanksgiving, let us be a help in reminding all of you to share the thoughts and words that come from the heart this year with one of our holiday greeting cards." or something of the like would sound better, it will take the focus off any words that throw a mental "dollar sign" up-you DONT want that!
2006-07-30 17:05:49 · answer #10 · answered by mello83 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Please join us this Thanksgiving as we share our many blessings. By simply purchasing these wonderful holiday greeting cards, you will provide a Thanksgiving Day Meal for our community's neediest people.
2006-07-30 17:16:28 · answer #11 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋