what do you think ?

Question

ok what do you think of the poem i rote ? is all the spelling ok ?( im not a good @ spelling ) im 13

I cut my wrists, It feels so good,
I stand there alone not understood.
The pain is to deep,
I can feel my heart beat.
The bleeding will not cease.
I lay there in a heap, The pain to for to deep.
Don't let me near any sharp things,
For I can and will use them to cut my self and sin.
I cry at night,
You ask what's wrong I say
"nothing"
and just keep walking a long.
You role your eyes in disbelief,
As I walk past with a silent tear,
Rolling down my cheek.
I never meant to hurt my self,
but it always ends up that way.
I have to stop cutting my self,or I will end up dead some
day.

"The for the pain is to deep" not "The pain to for to deep." sorry :( my bad

Answer 1

I like your poem. It really evokes many emotions when I read it. That is the point of poetry, to capture our feelings in writing so that someone else can read it and take a peek at our soul.

I really hope that you are okay. Life is such a precious thing. It never seems that way at 13, but it does get so much better.

Answer 2

Hello, I do think you are a talented writer. I don't think you should be cutting yourself. I know and understand how you feel. You could take this too far one day and your wonderful writting ability would go to waste. At 13, your body is going through some serious hormonal changes. Everyone , absolutely everyone has gone through the same thing you are. They just express their pain differently. As a teen , it is hard to see past this pain. I lost my best friend at 15. I still feel that pain today, 26 years later. If you died , you would hurt everyone who loves you and it would make them suffer the rest of their lives without you. That is what my friend did to me and her parents. She had way more friends then she thought. People who cared came to her funeral. Her father , who was the hardest on her, was devistated. Anyway, Please consider healthy ways to work through pain. Chat with someone about what is bothering you. Exercise that is fun like a sport that you like. My favorite is swimming and biking and walking my dog. Really - it clears the mind. You can get through anything in your life if you just give it time. Time changes everything. Also, seeing a therapist is healthy- it totally means you are smart enough to get help. You will feel so much better. Best of Luck and don't stop writting. You are very GOOD!

Answer 3

......no comment.......although if you look at it from an emo point of veiw, its a really good poem. except all of the to's, should be too. with 2 o's.

Answer 4

It's good and I can tell that you are so depressed. Can you even tell that their are people who actually love you? Don't think that you are alone.

Answer 5

Good job :) , but I hope it's not true. Life's a ***** doesn't deserve cutting yourself.

Answer 6

well, you're your 13 ;>
it's not bad

after few years i think you'll start to write about more optimistic things and it would be much better

Answer 7

If you feel any emptiness, don't hide it..........seek help, I mean anybody somebody who you might feel comfortable speaking about a problem.

Answer 8

I think that it is sad! And if it is about you or someone close to you, you need to talk to a professional.

Answer 9

it was ok keep writin.......do u cut? becuz if u do um stop so u don't hurt or kill urself


PS i'm 13 too

Answer 10

poor emo :'(
actually its quite good