Maybe you can even help me out with writing it? hehe
Here it is:
As I watch the rain fall and I hear your call
It hits me
I miss you.
And as I pretend to (never) ever care when your not there.
I realize
I love you
and when I laugh around with my friends and have a ball
It comes to me
I need you.
Yeah...No?...
2006-07-28 07:27:43 · 8 answers · asked by Ashley Marlene 3 in Entertainment & Music ➔ Music
I like it, but the 3rd example (I need you) should be more about how she's independant and strong, to contrast that she still needs the person. Just a thought...but keep going. It's good. I'd like to hear what the music is like.
2006-07-28 07:33:44 · answer #1 · answered by Pumpkin 3 · 1⤊ 0⤋
It's lovely well for a Lupe album.... i might placed it at third (aka higher than lasers now not particularly as well as his first two however near). The matters you acknowledged are the equal obstacle each Lupe album has, well songs installed among unhealthy ones, deficient creation and hit and miss hooks. That's why Lupe has in no way gotten album of the 12 months even if he blew up with F&L1. So because of this I relatively favored the album... I anticipated the entire unhealthy songs and bought a handful of well songs and it was once higher than Lasers. To experience Lupe you have got to make a playlist, now not simply take a seat by way of an album.. however in the event you do that he's a fine rapper.
2016-08-28 16:25:59 · answer #2 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
It's cute and pop-ish but you need to get rid of the "Have a ball." part. I didn't care for that, it sounds, well... dated. No one "has a ball." anymore... Don't use things just because they rhyme. Its lame. Unless it's a country song... Then go ahead and use it.
The song is great though, I can almost hear the melody line.
2006-07-28 07:33:29 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
yea it is not bad...
i'm more into writing poems...i have wanted to write lyrics too but i am still trying :)
maybe the hook could be...
i realize
i miss you
i need you
i love you...
why dont you come to me...?
good luck...hope this helps.
2006-07-28 07:33:35 · answer #4 · answered by ashchicka2006 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Sounds pretty good so far, but I agree with the person above me to drop the "have a ball" part.
2006-07-28 08:17:55 · answer #5 · answered by Tragic Remedy 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
i think its great. and i would love to see the finished piece... my first song was like this kinda short.. but u get better,. this is great!
2006-07-28 07:33:46 · answer #6 · answered by cranberries 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It's very nice! I like it.
2006-07-28 07:30:18 · answer #7 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
its good realy
2006-07-28 07:29:45 · answer #8 · answered by AlyssaElaine 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋