A cool blue ocean, a crimson dawn or a blessing from above,
I would sacrifice it all to let you know m y love
A passion flower in the spring, and a brightly burning star,
When I look past it all, standing, there you are.
More than just a hope, so much greater than a dream,
You give me courage that I lack, and undoubted self esteem.
Have you seen a rainbow on a snow tipped peak?
You are so much more graceful and so greatly more unique.
The gentlest of creatures, in a forest capped with green,
But still you are, by far, the greatest IV ever seen!
And if all the beauty’s in the world were to slowly disappear,
No sadness and no loneliness would I feel, if you I could have near.
You give me strength, you give me hope, my heart you keep burning bright,
I long for your calming touch, to get me through the night.
Would you take my hand if all this I could give?
I pry you would, for without you I could not live.
2006-07-28 01:10:36 · 9 answers · asked by manic jester 2 in Entertainment & Music ➔ Polls & Surveys
A sun kissed touch and a tear drop from the gods above,
Nothing would be more intense than a pin prick of your love.
Have you ever flown, above clouds have you soared?
I would give it all to you a thousand times and more!
A love like yours is a treasure, that would never go amiss,
And the love I feel for you will never be dismissed!
So tell me, would you love me, the way that I love you? My
love is unconditional, and I promise that that’s true!
But by the looks of it now, I was just to slow to show,
Now you have a lover, and im still all alone
So please be happy in all that you do
That’ can be your way of showing me, that you love me to!
2006-07-28 01:10:56 · update #1
ahaha yea this poem was dedicated to someone, but was written about 2 years ago, it makes me laugh because after about a week of writting it i sort of lost the emotion for that person, i keep it as a reminder and it does still make me think of certin people just not the person it was originaly written for.
2006-07-28 01:48:15 · update #2
Is this dedicated to someone?
Well if u r planning to read it to someone, i am sure that person will love it!I think u r really good and maybe a bit romantic too?!
2006-07-28 01:40:03 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 2⤊ 1⤋
VERY COOL!! I liked it very much,..it was awsome,..I wonder what kind a person r u if u wrote it,..aahh,..sorry,u'r not a person u'r a miracle!!!! I think all wanna feel in that way the truly love,..and be happy..
2006-07-28 08:35:44 · answer #2 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
found a typo! but never mind that. this is at best, pedantic and unrelenting ( that's a complement). and your rhyming skills are unmatched (rhyming every other line gets very boring though)
try something shorter, like this:
i
i am
i
you
are you
you?
(yes, the spacing matters)
2006-07-28 08:16:33 · answer #3 · answered by bakbiter 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I thought it was very beautiful. There is alot of emotion in it. I would love to have someone give me such a poem. Thanks, that made me smile.
2006-07-28 08:14:19 · answer #4 · answered by jagerchick80 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
YOUR POEM IS VERY NICE, FULL OF LOVE AND ROMANCE.
SORRY ABOUT THE SAD ENDING... TOMORROW IS ANOTHER DAY AND THE BEST IS YET TO COME.
2006-07-28 08:19:31 · answer #5 · answered by ACACIA 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
thank you! you have a talent...what a wonderful poem...thumbs up. you should give your poetry to ppl or to magazines or something. you'd make someone's day.
2006-07-28 08:17:11 · answer #6 · answered by hi 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
okay i am not the one for Ode's ........ yeah it's not bad..i came for 2 points but i am pleased now
2006-07-28 08:18:39 · answer #7 · answered by JJ 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Yes, I will marry you.
2006-07-28 08:15:30 · answer #8 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
not
2006-07-28 08:17:26 · answer #9 · answered by its ME !!! 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋