I love to write poetry, and I've written 42 since Novemeber. But I'm just trying to get people's opinions about some of my poems. So here's two.
The Wish I Wished
Last night I wished upon a star,
Hoping it would find you wherever you are.
The wish I wished was made for you,
And it was wishing that all your wishes would come true.
The wish I wished last night,
I wished with every bit of might.
I’m hoping that my wish will come true,
So that all of yours can too!
The Liar’s Words
There was a time when I believed,
Everything you told me.
But then one day I found out the truth,
And I realized you had lied.
When I found out you had lied to me,
It hurt me deep down inside.
Your lies had led me to believe,
Something that wasn’t true.
And since I thought your words were the truth,
I started to fall for you.
And know because of what you said,
It makes me cry every once in a while.
So now I know not to believe,
The liar’s words.
2006-07-27 10:52:24 · 6 answers · asked by snappypappy797 3 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Other - Arts & Humanities
honestly the liar poem was good. the wish one didn't really make sense but it was good...? maybe is you work a little harder on them you'll get to where you want to be. <<<
2006-07-27 11:01:39 · answer #1 · answered by Takumi 3 · 8⤊ 0⤋
These would be good for children or song lyrics or greeting cards for their simple lyrical structure. However, if you would like to write poems in a different style, I would suggest using word variation and no or little rhyming. Those familiar with poetry call this "cooked" vs. "raw" structure, i.e. something by Robert Frost vs. something by Ginsburg.
2006-07-27 18:36:21 · answer #2 · answered by Snickles 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Those are really beautiful poems, I am a writer myself, though I am very young it is a way of expressing myself and I wrote my first poem in the 3rd grade...and have grown in my writing so much more. Continue to write and you will progress!!!!!
2006-07-27 17:57:43 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Very airy and simple. i think you have great potential. Keep writing and take some creative writing classes because I think you really can do so well. Have a great day.
2006-07-27 17:58:35 · answer #4 · answered by firestarter 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
They're beautiful poems. Have you considered getting them published?
2006-07-27 17:56:33 · answer #5 · answered by chrstnwrtr 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
no
2006-07-27 17:55:35 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋