I think of you more than any other,
in my thoughts and dreams,
I seem to ALWAYS be thinking of you,
Are you thinking of me?
I wish we could talk more,
but it seems we are too busy,
the less we talk, the more we grow apart,
and the more i feel your forgeting me
Does absence make the heart grow fonder?
Or does it just hurt more,
But now instead of thinking about us,
I think about how you seemed to shut the door.
~So I am about to go into jr.high and i have been really bored. So i decided to write poetry. This is one of many. But i really like this one. So what do you think?~
2006-07-26 19:21:15 · 11 answers · asked by cuti pie 2 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Other - Arts & Humanities
This is really good. It reminds me of the poetry I used to write when I was in Junior High. That's a compliment, not a diss by the way. I'm going to graduate high school next year and my poems have become SO MUCH better because I've experienced and learned more about love and life. If you keep writing, you'll notice the same thing. I still keep all the old ones in a shoe box under my bed for perspective. Its nice to see how far I've come. You have talent and I hope you never give up writing. Its a very good way to express yourself.
2006-07-26 19:41:05 · answer #1 · answered by mlove1307 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Kinda sad huh? But you're doing great and over the years as long as you keep writing you'll notice your poetry will evolve. It's a trip! You don't have to take my advice but it's fun to maybe broaden your vocabulary by using unique words while describing things or feelings. Or (this is something I do):not really rhyme but keep a steady rhythm that flows out in a way. I'd like to read more of your stuff so e-mail or not.
unmovingasp@yahoo.com
2006-07-26 19:42:03 · answer #2 · answered by unmovingasp 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
For someone who is just starting jr. high, I'de say it's grand, it's honest. And as you grow, with age will come the wisdom, therefore better and brighter ideas; and naturally advanced vocabulary. Don't ever stop writing. People who write have something special, a smiling soul.
Always write, so people like me can read and relate(those who can't put down their thoughts on a paper).
Good luck
2006-07-26 19:33:43 · answer #3 · answered by XenT 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Beautiful - you have touched many hearts i am sure. You have just touched my heart with this poetry. Keep it up.
2006-07-26 21:40:55 · answer #4 · answered by zaazzy 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It was most impressive. You should continue to write poetry.
2006-07-26 19:29:53 · answer #5 · answered by Spartan Rob 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
very interesting, you made it a half complete poem, add alittle more feelings and cut out same repeated or same issues and it will be done.
2006-07-26 19:38:44 · answer #6 · answered by electricbluerocker 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Wonderful!!!!! Keep pursuing your dream!!!
2006-07-26 19:27:02 · answer #7 · answered by lovelyandcarefree 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It's very touching, I like it.
2006-07-26 19:25:29 · answer #8 · answered by newyorkgal71 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Don't give up your day job
2006-07-26 19:24:57 · answer #9 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Very beautifull,are you in love??????????
2006-07-26 19:39:56 · answer #10 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋