Okay. Everyone said I should make my poetry shorter. And I wouldn't even be bothering to post this, except that I usually post everything on my blog, but I don't want my friends to say I'm being all EMO. This is one poem I don't want to share with my friends. Anyway, I guess I'm saying I'd rather hear what a bunch of strangers think of my poetry, so criticize away!
I’ve never been kissed,
Never had a dance,
Never been liked,
Never had a chance,
With a guy,
And I don’t know why.
I’ve never gone out,
Never been on a date,
Never went to the movies,
Or stayed out late,
With some guy,
And I wonder why.
I’ve never been loved,
Never told I was hot,
Never been with a guy,
Never glad for what I got,
With any guy,
But why?
And now as my tears,
Fall like hot rain,
I realize the truth,
It comes from my pain,
I’ve never had a guy.
And the reason.
Is.
Me.
It must be.
2006-07-26 19:06:47 · 18 answers · asked by Anonymous in Arts & Humanities ➔ Other - Arts & Humanities
I think it's great and you put alot of feeling into your poetry...I would like to hear another...Please don't keep your promise...You have talent,why not like the world know about it...The more you write,The better you get...
Your Friend Clowmy
2006-07-26 19:17:23 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 7⤊ 2⤋
That's the first poem I've read on here that didn't fill my heart with regret at having wasted the time.
I like it. Particularly the last line. "Never glad for what I got" rather stumbles.
I don't believe in poetry as a rule. I wonder if you shouldn't focus your talents on prose.
2006-07-27 02:11:07 · answer #2 · answered by Happy 4 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Well, it kind of seems like the subject is wallowing in self-pity. Assuming she's a teenager, there is plenty of time for these things to happen. There is always someone out there for you, and who knows, maybe the person is just to shy to say anything. Or maybe you just need to be more outgoing. Sorry- forgot to answer the question: I like the poem.
2006-07-27 02:13:02 · answer #3 · answered by someone in the world 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I like it. I think it is a good poem. Makes me want to start writing poetry again.
2006-07-27 02:16:08 · answer #4 · answered by gh0zts_angel 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I'm an old geezer and it makes me feel really sad. If I were younger I'd take you out. I think that the guys you know are fool to miss out on a very special person.
2006-07-27 02:23:25 · answer #5 · answered by Track Walker 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Actually I like this poem as well.. and it has the type of rythmn to it that it could be a song... so don't listen to whomever is telling you that you shouldn't share your poetry anywhere.. it is important to share our talents!! Let your light so shine!!!
2006-07-27 02:15:24 · answer #6 · answered by walkietalkiethree2003 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
OK TRUTH THAT POEM MAKES YOU SOUND PATHETIC, LIKE YOUR SO HORRIBLE YOU CANT "GET A GUY" YOUR POEM SAYS THE REASON I CANT IS BECAUSE OF ME AND IF YOU LOOK BACK ON YOUR POEM, YOU POOR THING, YOU COULDN'T GET NOTHING... I HAVE TO ASK ARE YOU SUICIDAL? AND ONE MORE THING THIS IS AN QUESTION AND ANSWER SITE SO PPL HAVE A PLACE TO GET INFO ON THINGS THEY DONT KNOW, YOUR NOT ASKING A QUESTION YOU PUTTING YOUR PITIFUL POEMS ON IT FISHING FOR COMPLIMENTS. WELL YOUR NOT GETTING ONE. TOWARDS THE END YOU COULDN'T EVEN GET IT TO RHYME ANYMORE.
2006-07-27 02:31:41 · answer #7 · answered by asphaltangel77 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It sounds heartfelt, but sad. All I can tell you is it will get better. I was not popular in school, but I sure rose up and met the challenge once I got out of school!
2006-07-27 02:12:32 · answer #8 · answered by carolewkelly 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It's nice
Just a note: Guys are not the be all and end all of everything in life. Love yourself, love your spirit and you'll find bliss.
2006-07-27 02:12:22 · answer #9 · answered by Anya M 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I think it's a good poem. Conveys teenage angst well. Good luck with your writing. You should share it with your peers. You are a good writer.
2006-07-27 03:01:50 · answer #10 · answered by beckini 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋