Once there was a little girl. She loved cats and had 5 that she sharded with her family. It was the theme of her room and she grew up with one.She grew up with one kitten. The kitten's name was Ruby. A name that her mom picked out. The little girl's name was Elizabeth but everyone called her Emily. Emily was born on her family's farm right at the same second and day Ruby was being born. Ruby and Emily were the best of friends and believe it or not since Ruby was the most common word Emily heard, that was her first word. Emily was only 2 months old when she said Ruby. When Emily was only 7 years old when she died. She died of a deadly lung cancer from her father smoking continously around her. Ruby was alone now and the poor cat had no point of life. About 2 weeks later Ruby died of old age and a broken heart. At last Ruby and Emily were united again!
2006-07-26 09:45:20 · 9 answers · asked by Anonymous in Arts & Humanities ➔ Other - Arts & Humanities
That was a very touching, sweet, and sad story. A very Bitter- Sweet story. Great Job!
2006-07-26 09:58:43 · answer #1 · answered by Laz♥ 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
how old are you?
sounds like your 8 years old. mentaly, maybe 5 years old.
sorry to be mean.
i didnt like the story. there was no point to this story. you just told us about emily and ruby and how old they were and when they were born and when they died. thats it. nothing else fasinating. nothing that gets my attention.
your entire story was too long and pointless. all of that should be only like 5 sentances in a story. not as much as your wrote.
make it short and simple and sweet. add some detail. add some excitment. add a part to this story, befor they die, and say how they went to the river when emily was 7. say how they played on her bed or in the leaves. add an accident in the story and say how they bonded even more after one servived. add some flava.
2006-07-26 09:53:04 · answer #2 · answered by All4Christ 4 · 0⤊ 1⤋
Elizabeth would be beth or liz not emily.
You misspelled SHARED as SHARDED
The entire story is dull, stupid and has no point and no flow.
I can tell you are anti smoking and like cats but thats it
2006-07-26 09:52:03 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 1⤋
That is a sad story. At least they got back together at the end. ~
2006-07-26 09:51:54 · answer #4 · answered by pinneapple_418 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Ain't a real cheerful story, is it? Creatively punctuated.
2006-07-26 09:48:53 · answer #5 · answered by Happy 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It really wasn't my kind of story I like.
2006-07-26 09:49:01 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
wow 2 months old and allready talking!! crazy.. lol i liked it alot tho it was cute!
2006-07-26 10:00:57 · answer #7 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
very touching good job!!!!!
2006-07-26 09:49:17 · answer #8 · answered by â?¥á?¦á?¦â?¥ CRISSY â?¥á?¦á?¦â?¥ 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
no
2006-07-26 09:50:18 · answer #9 · answered by Marisa C 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋