I don't know how to start my chapter [writer's block] but I need an idea of a sentence of paragraph how to start my chapter off with. So, this chapter is about a sailor[not the main character] who comes to an officer, crying out that he found a dead body on the shore. The Officer[kind of the main character] follows the man to find a young lady, and when he kind of moves her seaweed like hair from her face, she moves...she's alive[the heroine]. So, how should I start this chapter off with??I was thinking...about starting with the sailing crying out that he saw a dead body...
2006-07-25 19:54:15 · 10 answers · asked by J.Welkin 1 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Books & Authors
To begin you need a "hook" in the first paragraph that is still able to build through the chapter.
Here I have to guess about time period, nationality, location, and even the weather ...
"Officer"
The hail snapped my attention. Running across the lonely beach was a sailor scared pale in the moonlight.
"Your drunk, now clean back to the ship and sober up on board before you set to take over watch." I ordered as he ran up but heedless of my orders he blurted out ...
"Sire, its dead sire!" crying out loudly "saw a dead body.. come see it and tell us what we can do so as not to be sent straight to hell or the gallows, we done nothin' wrong but we most sure to get punished on this one sir!"
I began to realize he was not over drunk just over wrought and start to follow where he pointed. Slowly we moved together down the beach to a section of reeds at the far end of the cove near a wee stream mouth.
He pointed to a body still caught in the waves and deathly eerie as it floated in a patch of seaweeds. I set him to drag it in despite his panicky protests. On shore the small body proved itself not long dead, it was still soft but not putrid. I moved a patch of sea bleached hair aside and touched a still soft face, poor lad this ...
He coughed .. he was still live ... I went to work quickly and breathed a little air into his mouth then pushed on his chest to pump out the seawater. This was no boys chest but very feminine breasts.
best wishes on the rest of your story ..
2006-07-25 21:04:17 · answer #1 · answered by PlayTOE- 3 · 1⤊ 0⤋
The sailor is walking along the shore looking for seashells or something.The sailor's hat blows in the wind and brings him around some rocks where he finds he body.He yells out for help.But no one hears him so he runs up the shore where he knows he'll find the officer blank and brings the officer to the body...
something like that
hope this helps
2006-07-25 20:01:31 · answer #2 · answered by Alicia 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Why don't you start it of by describing the sailor walking from an event or to an event and literally stumbling over the body of the young lady. He could be so disturbed that he doesn't even think to check and see if she is alive before he goes running off to find a policeman.
2006-07-25 20:03:41 · answer #3 · answered by moonlight_is_harmonious_1 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I'm a writer myself. I think, given the scenario, I would probably start off with the thoughts of the Officer. Normal day, calm sea, what have you. Then here comes this panic stricken sailor, crying out. But that's just me. I've always been better at description and inner monologue than conversation. I rarely start off with quotation marks. Again, that's just me.
2006-07-25 20:28:09 · answer #4 · answered by ghostlygirl 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Go the action route. Use dialogue. Make the sailor say, hey officer come quick, there's a dead body,yada yada.
It pulls in the reader and it's not all narrative.
2006-07-25 20:00:17 · answer #5 · answered by csucdartgirl 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I think it would be cool if you gave a little creepy description of the woman on the ground and then described the sailor walking over to the woman's body.
2006-07-25 20:00:18 · answer #6 · answered by Ana Banana 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
"Sir! On the shore! She's dead!"
Captain Officer (or whatever the character's name is) turned distractedly to the young sailor.
"Never a moment's rest," he muttered. "What is it?"
"Sir, I found a dead body. You must come at once."
and so on.
2006-07-25 20:01:50 · answer #7 · answered by Quiet Amusement 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
He cried out in horror when he saw her lifeless.....
The thought of her dead lifeless corpse....
Approaching the lifeless body....
"She's dead!", said the sailor, while trying to catch his breath....
He stumbled upon what he thought was....
2006-07-25 20:02:53 · answer #8 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
near the beach an officer sat almost lifeless with boredom. Nothing but his donuts seemed to matter nowadays, but now he heard something...
2006-07-25 20:00:24 · answer #9 · answered by miho9000 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
it was a dark and stormy night.....
2006-07-25 20:01:04 · answer #10 · answered by rubberduck 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋