do u like this poem?

Question

As I stroll down the walkway I see all the others on my left who are speculating to themselves in the brain and having day dreams on that was a average day and on the right there was one other man I ask him for answers which he did not need to have as he told me the way it was when there where no answers for there where no questions to have answers and there was not much to think about and how this is like a dream and it is not a first-class one and there is very little use is trying to wake me up by taking my sole it belongs the one of there shows it was not a normal conversion it was like we where being murdered and there where no tears but some moans but the money can fix that and make us free workers of are free world this is the time for your tears cry cry cry and the money will poured in and be pulled out.

Answer 1

I had a little trouble understanding it. There are a few mistakes with your choice of words. I find it interesting though. When you talked about asking questions, did you mean because the man came from a time when you speak when and only when being spoken to, and you do not question your elders? (that what I understood.) By the murdering, did you mean people are losing who they are, and all they can do is complain? Like if they were no longer who they wanted to be but couldnt cry, except complain? Im guessing the money part has to do with how money is taking over and thats all people see, thats all they want. With money anything can be "fixed." Meanwhile those who dont make enough are basically working for free because the amount they make isnt enough to live...Tell me if Im wrong. (The poem seemed more as if it were a dream-unexplainable.)

Answer 2

For me a poem has to have rhythm. It does not always have got to rhyme nevertheless it demands to hit my feelings. I suppose readability of expression is main as good. I do not love to moment wager what I'm studying approximately. I constantly appear for what I time period "poetic gem stones"within the textual content.

Answer 3

yeah,
here is one thing that could make it easier to understand, keep in mind i'm not trying to be mean...
but use more periods and commas like that you have to re-read some of it and makes it a little more difficult to understand...

Answer 4

That's the good thing about poetry you don't have to like it, it just is. I write too so that's why I wouldn't judge your work in a negative why.

Answer 5

reminds me of one i wrote that spoke of "looking into the eyes of strangers, peering into the windows of their souls"

there is wisdom and knowledge to be gained, sucked out, of people we pass everyday.

i liked it...it made me think.

Answer 6

mmm. Didn't do much for me. Saw glimpses of stuff. But it had no fire, no energy. It must pop pop pop! It must be green!

Answer 7

it's like a song lyric