Crimson Rivers
On the bare canvas of my body,
Furiously do I begin to paint,
with crimson colors from within,
strokes wild and multihued,
to ease my raging anguish,
or to spill my irrepressible ecstacy
Whenever the torrent surges,
And unbearable becomes the feel
I reach for that blade
carving wildly to ease
Till before me emerges
That which has raced unbridled within
Tears stem and agony eases
Laughter tamed, bliss contained,
Anguish explained
Love sustained
And I find myself whole and stable
Once again
So furiously do I create my art
with the colors of my inner pain
My world as it does in me reel,
Bringing forth the surreal,
Till the portrait of my emotions
Stands revealed, for me to comprehend and believe...
2006-07-25 18:06:45 · 16 answers · asked by Anonymous in Entertainment & Music ➔ Polls & Surveys
your poem is deep, it is very good. I to am a poet. I would work on the second and third verses because I sort of get lost and lose what exactly you are expressing, but it has so much potential. It is quite deep. Make sure you are copywriting your poems before you share them because others will steal your work, ok
2006-07-25 18:15:17 · answer #1 · answered by sugarfireandice 2 · 0⤊ 1⤋
I adored the final phase. It used to be particularly well. I wasn't particularly following the primary few components..however to supply you the advantage of the doubt..it is past due and I've had a foul day! The handiest more thing is a few spelling mistakes, however that is minor. That's best that you are into poetry, I desire you keep it up..perhaps a few day you'll get whatever released!
2016-08-28 17:48:45 · answer #2 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
When I read this I get the picture of a bare chested man slashing his body with a knife to feel relief. Great Imagry, I especially enjoyed the second stanza.
2006-07-25 18:13:12 · answer #3 · answered by shaun1986 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Great Job Keep It Going
2006-07-25 18:11:44 · answer #4 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
There are few words to describe what this poem is just WOW
Great visual
Shows Soul
And Is intrestin
Wonerful
2006-07-25 18:15:37 · answer #5 · answered by EMO cupcake 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It sounds very very good set up with many colorful words and meaning.
2006-07-25 18:13:02 · answer #6 · answered by afvet3471 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Decent. Maybe a little overstated at times.
2006-07-25 18:12:52 · answer #7 · answered by Daniel B 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
This poem is exquisite!
But if these things are happening,
you might need counseling.
2006-07-25 18:13:16 · answer #8 · answered by Violet 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Well done. You should look into getting published. It is really good.
2006-07-26 02:10:53 · answer #9 · answered by Irish_bi_female 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It's really good, seriously, but I hope you're not cutting yourself or anything!
2006-07-25 18:11:59 · answer #10 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋