At first I was afraid
I was petrified
Kept thinking I could never live
without you by my side
But then I spent so many nights
thinking how you did me wrong
And I grew strong
And I learned how to get along
and so you're back
from outer space
I just walked in to find you here
with that sad look upon your face
I should have changed that stupid lock
I should have made you leave your key
If I had known for just one second
you'd be back to bother me
Go on now go walk out the door
just turn around now
'cause you're not welcome anymore
weren't you the one who tried to hurt me with goodbye
Did you think I'd crumble
Did you think I'd lay down and die
Oh no, not I
I will survive
Oh as long as i know how to love
I know I will stay alive
I've got all my life to live
I've got all my love to give
and I'll survive
I will survive (hey-hey)
2006-07-25 12:38:23 · 13 answers · asked by Anonymous in Arts & Humanities ➔ Other - Arts & Humanities
lol that was a great poem keep on writeing and never give up on true love
2006-07-25 12:43:43 · answer #1 · answered by daddys lil girl 3 · 1⤊ 1⤋
you use too much simple language to trully convey how you feel... no metaphors, symbols or other poetic maneuvers leave this poem kind of bland...
one line doesn't even rhyme with another: "weren't ......... goodbye."
it's really not about using big words here... you just want to express yourself as well as you can through your vocabulary...
i also think you'd be better served to write something this complex in quatrains instead of ancient meter...
2006-07-25 19:51:26 · answer #2 · answered by greaterrome 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It's rocks almost as much as the Cake cover of the song "I will survive"
2006-07-25 19:42:17 · answer #3 · answered by coleridge49 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
You just plagiarized Gloria Gaynor's song "I Will Survive."
2006-07-25 19:43:57 · answer #4 · answered by chrstnwrtr 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Wow. It's almost good enough to be a hit song!
2006-07-25 19:42:44 · answer #5 · answered by dt 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
that's already written. IT'S A SONG! It is already famous and you can't take the fame from the girl who wrote that OK!?
2006-07-25 19:42:36 · answer #6 · answered by mysterious 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
haha pretty funny its a song already
2006-07-25 19:41:33 · answer #7 · answered by shadi649 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Not bad, would you be donna summer in drag.
2006-07-25 19:41:52 · answer #8 · answered by Neal J 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Aren't you plagiarizing?
2006-07-25 19:42:55 · answer #9 · answered by highchaparral2006 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
i love that song.. it's a classic
2006-07-25 19:50:33 · answer #10 · answered by babsie 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋