bleeding majesty in an oil slick abyss.
screaming amnesty over wailing sirens this-
eye level grave has plagued wanderers in times midst.
a crumpled page within times fist will list dead kings.
as you cut through trees leaves bleed mist and forming spring.
I'm informing spring that winters moon has moved to june.
soon the barren womb of this balloon will be my tomb.
but i cannot stomach the followers flashy signs.
neon g-strings where the g stands for gravity i'm-
the puke of these nukes in amniotic acid baths.
flash fragments fire sky prolonged epitaphs n' rations.
beat to the punch laugh my face is mangled torn satin.
passion is the half of me that searches for the rest.
a serpent swallows its own tail I then chase my breath.
I chase it through a fox hole thats a worm hole as im left-
timeless and confused to see a fox court a rabbit.
I, just a creature but no creature out of habbit.
without it or you have it indigos souls ravaged.
2006-07-24 18:34:19 · 16 answers · asked by QuizTheOneWithoutOne 3 in Entertainment & Music ➔ Polls & Surveys
i realize i asked this under my other account already. i did spell check my work this time for all you ocd "geniuses" out there.i'm a rapper so cut all the goth questions.NOT EVERYTHING CAN BE UNICORNS AND SUNBEAMS!
2006-07-24 18:35:43 · update #1
by rapper i dont mean "gangster" i am an emcee.
2006-07-24 18:41:44 · update #2
i have no idea wat its about. I can't even get any gist off a subject except the word blood comes up a lot. I can't even begin to rate it so I'm sorry it's not even a 0.
2006-07-24 18:39:14 · answer #1 · answered by greyeyedgodess 1 · 0⤊ 2⤋
1
2006-07-24 18:37:51 · answer #2 · answered by Samantha 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
5
2006-07-24 18:41:31 · answer #3 · answered by countrylovinggirl81 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
5
2006-07-24 18:39:57 · answer #4 · answered by angieschwander 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
9
2006-07-24 18:38:31 · answer #5 · answered by underwaterangel 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
9
2006-07-24 18:37:31 · answer #6 · answered by mazzygirl83 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
"as you cut through trees leaves bleed mist and forming spring.
I'm informing spring that winters moon has moved to june.
soon the barren womb of this balloon will be my tomb."
I like that the most
very powerful
8.8
2006-07-24 18:38:17 · answer #7 · answered by Coxie Megan 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Neat. I'd give it a 7 because some of it is a bit hard to follow. I think this poem could become a 10 with some editing.
2006-07-24 18:38:21 · answer #8 · answered by Aki 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
10... I liked it, alot. I know what yoiu mean about not everything being unicorns and sunbeams. I write "dark" poetry myself. Kudos for you, I love the imagery, I felt like I was plunged right in the middle of it all. Good job :)
2006-07-24 18:39:11 · answer #9 · answered by Stephanie 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
This is a very deep poem and filled with metaphorical twists and relations. I will have to read it several times and see if i get more of the message you have cleverly crafted, so far it work,
2006-07-24 18:45:47 · answer #10 · answered by want2flybye 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I found It hard to follow In parts but all In all It`s great. You have a really fantastic talent. Well done 8.5
2006-07-24 18:43:32 · answer #11 · answered by - 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋