She saves string
A weary thing,
Pitiably sad,
Determinedly mad;
With no use in mind,
No packages to bind
For no kitty to unwind;
She saves string,
Never whines,
Forgets no signs;
Looks up periodically
Saves string methodically.
2006-07-24 15:32:05 · 5 answers · asked by haroldpohl2000 4 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Other - Arts & Humanities
I love it. Your word choice and cadence conjure the image of a whispy girl and her slip of strings. Write more.
2006-07-24 15:40:05 · answer #1 · answered by Chainsawmom 5 · 1⤊ 2⤋
My only suggestion would be to eventually get to the part of why she saves string.
2006-07-24 22:46:03 · answer #2 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
no , this is what the most difficult task u have asked to do , we can only feel the poem we can't comment on that , all is poem a big silence is also a poem as i can't comment on your question i can't only understand it !!
2006-07-24 22:47:42 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
it s humorous.it s got good rhyming, flow and structure, it s very coherent and thorough.
2006-07-24 22:40:50 · answer #4 · answered by inDmood 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I think it is great. Please keep up the good work.
2006-07-24 22:53:09 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋