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Weak
Melting in your hands
Crumbling at your feet
I am weak
Weak to the lies that you feed me
Weak in your eyes
And my eyes
Weak are my desires
Weak are the possibilities I aspire
Weak are the capabilities I acquire
Weak to your "I am Sorry" Routine
Weak to your disguises
And the many faces you hide
Wise to your games, but
Weak to believe you will change
Weak to trust
Weak to think it won't be this way
Weak to think I chose this..
Ill-fated relationship that makes me sick
Naivety makes you weak
Weak to your knees
Til you can't breath
Or speak
Or do any other thing but
Be weak.

2006-07-24 13:50:23 · 7 answers · asked by Anonymous in Arts & Humanities ➔ Other - Arts & Humanities

7 answers

This is very well written.

Nice use of rhyme. Picturesque. Emotional with meaning.
Excellent poetic vocabulary.

It flows as a poem should. Do you often write in this manner? I would say that you have a flare for poetic expression.

2006-07-24 14:09:51 · answer #1 · answered by Anna M 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋

2006-07-24 21:31:28 · answer #2 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋

This was very good. I am not a big fan of poetry per se , but
this was very good.

2006-07-24 21:09:42 · answer #3 · answered by nemesis 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋

I like it. Sums up your feelings of someone very well.

2006-07-24 20:54:42 · answer #4 · answered by bettywitdabigbooty 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋

that was actually, pretty well thought out. nice job!

2006-07-24 20:54:15 · answer #5 · answered by Rich 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋

i like it.

2006-07-24 20:53:23 · answer #6 · answered by missybarnes 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋

I can relate to it. Thanks.

2006-07-24 20:54:57 · answer #7 · answered by Peace Pup 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋