just look outside your window, and see what lies before you. see the colors painted on the skies. and i, i; i will chase the sunset for you. and i, i; i will bring it back to you. if you just hold on to tonight. just hold on to the promise of tonight. may the beauty of these summer skies never cease to warm your heart and melt away the hurt and pain inside your crying eyes. if you just hold on to tonight. just hold on to the promise of tonight. and the sun is always the same tho you're miles and miles away and when i see the sun in these summer skies, i will think of you and see; the beauty that's hidden in your eyes, reflecting in these painted skies. if you just hold on to tonight. just hold on for me tonight...then everything, everything will be alright...
2006-07-23 15:19:53 · 10 answers · asked by lifeistough_period 1 in Entertainment & Music ➔ Other - Entertainment
i'm 16. do u think it's good for my age, or good in general, or not so good?
2006-07-23 15:30:44 · update #1
OMG that is SO good i LOVE it u should like send it out to one of those teen or adult magazines where they publish poems and stories or send it to a newspaper! u r really good who nos u could be the next big poet around or song writer around!
2006-07-23 15:26:32 · answer #1 · answered by ♥Nikki♥ 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
that's a effective sentiment yet slightly run-on and lacking a concise part. There are some extremely exciting concepts, like bringing the sundown "back to you." keep the gem stones and discard something. Like tremendous photographers -- they don't basically click a photo and get an excellent shot. They take thousands of images and %. one it is extremely sturdy.
2016-10-15 09:36:14 · answer #2 · answered by ? 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Speaking as a strictly amateur poet, I think it's pretty good. I think you have some talent there, keep on writing, and if you have other writings around the net that you've shared, feel free to send me a link, I would love to read some more of your work.
2006-07-23 15:25:39 · answer #3 · answered by shadowscarlet 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It's sweet, like something you would read in a hallmark card. It's a little maudlin, tho. just imho.
2006-07-23 15:23:55 · answer #4 · answered by Becca 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I like it sounds really good
2006-07-23 15:23:27 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
I like it, it's pretty nice! Honestly I don't think it could be improved....seriously!
2006-07-23 15:28:21 · answer #6 · answered by Ammy 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
some of it is from other songs.
2006-07-23 15:24:16 · answer #7 · answered by Karybdus 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
That is good! BRAVO
2006-07-23 15:23:50 · answer #8 · answered by MIN MIN 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
repitition is ok
2006-07-23 15:24:36 · answer #9 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
yes ma'am. i like it.
2006-07-23 15:23:26 · answer #10 · answered by Billy W 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋