How can i make this sound more perfesional and what other big words could i use?
My name is Brooke and I am a mature and responsible 15 year old, searching for more babysitting jobs.
My qualifications are as follows:
* I have 3 years of babysitting experience with children ranging from 10 months to 10 years old
* have general knowledge in first-aid, CPR, and babysitting through school and currently working towards certificate
* Am reliable, punctual, responsible, and trustworthy and will keep your children safe
- Will give devote my full attention to your kids
- Flexible schedule
- Reasonable prices (negotiable)
- Will do light house work (cleaning) while children are asleep
- I also offer to walk dogs, cook simple meals, & help with homework
- Available to baby-sit in the *area (local)
Contact me if you have any questions or to check availability at…
Home:
Cell:
Email:
2006-07-23 08:01:54 · 12 answers · asked by Anonymous in Business & Finance ➔ Small Business
sounds great
2006-07-23 08:04:26 · answer #1 · answered by purpal2002002 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I will edit this to show you what I feel would work. Keep in mind I have five children of my own so I know what I want. I have also done childcare and have some background there. I have copied your post and will edit it so look it over for changes.......................................
My name is Brooke and I am a mature and responsible Teen, searching for babysitting jobs.
My qualifications are as follows:
* I have 3 years of babysitting experience( I removed your age because of this portion many have issues with 12 year old babysitters and not feel it exp) with children ranging from 10 months to 10 years old
* have knowledge in first-aid, CPR, and babysitting through school and currently working towards certificate
* Am reliable, punctual, responsible, and trustworthy and will keep your children safe
- Will give devote my full attention to your kids
- Flexible schedule
- Reasonable prices
- Will do light house work (cleaning)
- I also offer to cook simple meals, & help with homework
- Available to baby-sit in the *area (local)
Contact me if you have any questions or to check availability at…
Home:
Cell:
Email:
2006-07-23 08:09:53 · answer #2 · answered by ? 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Great.
Couple of items:
You may want to take out the I's. It is already understood that the resume is about you.
eg: My qualifications are as follows:
* 3 years of ........
Working towards certificate...mention the name of the certificate or you can say "working towards a certification in ...... (name of the course).
Will give.......to your children. (makes it sound more professional than using kids.).
No commas before "and". Don't use "&" for "and".
Try not to use big words. The words you are using are just right. Employers want to read it fast and get the main points quickly. Look for a good heading or title. Check with people you have worked for before, to see if you can use them for reference. If they agree, add a line at the bottom "References available upon request." makes it a little more professional because people like to check up on employees.
Hey, great job and good luck. Hope you get a lot of jobs.
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2006-07-23 08:24:59 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
The following are just some of my qualifications:
-3 years of baby-sitting experience: children’s ages ranging from 10 mos to 10 yrs old
-general knowledge in first-aid and CPR, as I am in classes currently and will be certified within ? weeks
-reliable, punctual, responsible, and trustworthy
Bonuses:
-I can do light house work (cleaning) while children are asleep
-I can walk dogs (with the children of course), cook simple meals, & help the children with their homework.
-I am available to baby-sit in the ? area.
My promises to you:
-Flexible schedule
-Reasonable prices (negotiable)
-You can trust that my full attention will be given to your children while they are under my watch.
Contact me and never have a baby-sitting horror story to share.
Home:
Cell:
Email:
2006-07-23 08:10:42 · answer #4 · answered by Scadle 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
That sounds really great. I can tell you put alot of time and thought into this. The only thing I would reword is the part where you have "Will give devote my full attention to your kids" I would change the begining to "I will devote my full attention to your kids"
I would hire you if I had kids. Great job.
2006-07-23 08:07:22 · answer #5 · answered by TJ 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
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2016-10-15 03:07:45 · answer #6 · answered by sharona 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
hello i am willing to babysit all of your bad kids and i wont complane about how raggady or ugly your kids or your house is.i wont complain if you come back late from wherever you go whether its from a bar,a club,or just down the street where you may be scoring drugs.just pay me what i am owed and i will mind your horrible kids with no complaints......just do it this way and you will be hired in no time.fact is most people with kids are just dying to get away from them.
2006-07-23 08:16:49 · answer #7 · answered by mack j 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
That is great. Take out the "Negotiable" on your resonable prices. If they are reasonable, you have no need to negotiate. I would let you watch my kid and walk my dogs. Good one.
2006-07-23 08:03:42 · answer #8 · answered by skigod377 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
sound perfect Now all you do is make a lot of copies and youre ready
2006-07-23 08:05:55 · answer #9 · answered by JJcD 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
i think it sounds terrific just the way it is. honey i wish you were over here where i live. i'd hire you in a heartbeat!!
2006-07-23 08:06:33 · answer #10 · answered by origchick 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋