Am I any good?

Question

I like to write poetry in my spare time. . .I don't think I'm good at all, but some of my friends totally disagree with me. . .Here's a poem I wrote recently (and don't tell me I'm EMO, they're not all like it):

Why do we all,
Ignore what is right?
Why do so many,
Insist that we fight?
How can we live,
When nothing seems bright?
Why can't we fix this,
Try as we might?

How come some people,
Burn kittens on grills?
Why does raping small children,
Give some people thrills?
Why do people premote,
This war that kills?
Why does this not make,
Most people get chills?

Why do people care less,
About others than money,
How's it gotten so smoggy,
We can't tell when it's sunny?
Why do some people find,
Others' pain funny?
Whatever happened to,
"You catch more flies with honey?"

How sad must you be,
To cut your own wrist?
What makes people so angry,
To resort to their fist?
Why do little things,
Make some people so pissed?
How can we not think,
There's something we've missed?

When did gas-guzzling cars,
Become the next fad?
Why is being gay,
Considered so bad?
Why can't we relate,
When others are sad?
What's so wrong with us,
That we've all gone mad?

Does no one care,
That we're killing trees?
How can we drive animals,
To extinction with ease?
Why do some stay warm,
While others freeze?
How come some people,
Are so hard to please?

Why do people keep,
Racism going strong?
Why do some die young,
While others live long?
What gives us the right,
Do choose who belongs?
Why is what's right to some people,
So terribly wrong?

Why are some people rich,
While some starve each day?
Why do people's lives get so bad,
They think others must pay?
How come some children think,
Guns and knives are for play?

We can't save ourselves:
We're in our own way.

Answer 1

I think you have a fair amount of talent for writing poetry. I would guess you are quite young. If that's true, I think you could develop a lot in a short time by writing many poems. I think the strongest part of your talent is in your feeling for the rhythm, or meter, of poetry. You have a sense of rhyme also, but you let the strain for a rhyme force you to sometimes word things a little awkwardly, and even let it make you distort the meaning sometimes or say things there is no reason to say.. Everything should seem natural and unforced in a poem, no matter what kind it is. This can be improved by going back over a poem and reworking it until it flows naturally and the meaning is clear. The meaning is the most important thing, followed by the meter and then by the sounds, which includes rhymes, alliteration and assonance. If you don' t know what those last two are, look them up. You will see what they are immediately because you already have a tendency to use them. I think you should write a lot and develop your good talent.

Answer 2

Oh yes, Oh yes
That's more than a guess
Like me, what you write
Helps keep up the fight
To get out the word
People really have heard
Just keep right on writing
Your words are exciting.

Enter your poems at poetry.com

Answer 3

some people don't like political statements in something as pure as poetry, personally I think you have a beautiful talent, it's not easy to tell a story in rhyme, but you can. I hope you never lose it.

Answer 4

you have a lot of talent in poem writing and you could become a great poetier.Do not be hurt by what your friends say.IT is your life and its you to decide what to do not them.

Answer 5

Wish the best
Love

Answer 6

Very nce- I appreciate your talent

Answer 7

seems too simple to me

Answer 8

yea what you said