Tell me what you think.
I can’t believe this happened with Botan of all women. I mean yea she’s pretty but Yusuke always told me that I was prettier then she would ever be in her entire life’s. But that didn’t stop him from sleeping with her. I saw them together. I was coming home from my extra courses. So I’d thought I go and give Yusuke a visit and see how his mother is doing. And I did Yusuke and I had been going out for some time now and he gave me a key to his apartment. I unlocked the door and made my way to his mother’s room and I saw that she was sprawled out on her bed. So I went over and laid her straight and tucked her in and made my way to Yusuke’s room. As I was approaching I heard a quite moan but not a quite as the person thought. In my mind I thought okay Yusuke was pleasuring himself so I deicide to peek in and I didn’t expect to see what I saw. There in Yusuke’s bed was Yusuke himself and a girl I knew very well, Botan. I couldn’t believe my eyes.
2006-07-22 15:33:23 · 4 answers · asked by Anonymous in Entertainment & Music ➔ Comics & Animation
Here the rest it's not done so please be kind.
He was betraying me but I couldn’t find a voice to yell all I could do was cry and run away. 2 weeks passed and I ignored Yusuke and I just couldn’t face him my heart was broken and how am I suppose to deal. So I tried not to think of the situation first and just pretend that what I saw didn’t happen. I know you probably think that I’m stupid for just ignoring it but I love him and I want to make it work. So I gave him another chance and he cheated on me again but this time was a bit different. I found my voice and made myself well known.
2006-07-22 15:34:58 · update #1
I wrote this story and would like you all to read please.
2006-07-22 15:39:37 · update #2
This story is not about me it a first person story and the girl is Keiko.
2006-07-22 16:06:57 · update #3
I luv Yu Yu Hakusho! I thought they canceled.
2006-07-22 16:34:34 · answer #1 · answered by Savannah H 1 · 0⤊ 3⤋
All I can say is don't quit your day job. Original characters having relationships with the anime characters is never a good thing. And just about all of your sentences start with "I'. The writing is poor, the art behind a truly good story is to show the story, not tell it. That, and there doesn't seem to be a point, didn't you learn about plot in English? Introduction, Rising Action, Climax, Resolution? I'm pretty sure there's more than that, but you don't really have any of it.
A note: Chubby girl informed me the main character is Keiko. so the OC comment is mote. But still, I stand by my other words.
Elements of plot in a narrative
Initial situation - the beginning. It is the first incident that makes the story move.
Conflict or Problem - goal which the main character of the story has to achieve.
Complication (Rising Action) - obstacles which the main character has to overcome.
Climax - highest point of interest of the story.
Suspense - point of tension. It arouses the interest of the readers.
Denouement or Resolution - what happens to the character after overcoming all obstacles/failing to achieve the desired result and reaching/not reaching his goal.
Conclusion - the end of the story.
2006-07-22 15:55:02 · answer #2 · answered by WolfieChick 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
ur s2ry is a farce! i dont believe it! yusuke's not lyk dat! she loves keiko!
2006-07-22 18:56:25 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
i dont know what your talking about
2006-07-22 15:37:03 · answer #4 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋