Sharper,Redder
She stares in the mirror.
She realizes why.
She slowly dies inside;
The pain he brought..
The pain he left.
Her beloved.
The pain.
The tears.
The hope.
Gone.
Sharper...
No one cares.
No one ever did.
Never was there happiness.
Never was a genuine smile.
All fake.
Al devils.
They laughed.
She cried and died;
All inside.
Sharper, redder...
Yes, there was a time;
A time that she...thought
of happiness and joy.
No.
It was all a lie.
Never was a time that she was truly happy.
Truly?;
Only with her beloved.
They all laughed.
No one believed.
No one cared.
Never did she belong.
Never was she wanted.
Worthless.
Hopeless.
Ugly.
Sharper, redder, deeper..
Torture;
She awoke in the morning,
mourning,
mourning her love away;
He wouldn't leave.
Torture.
In the night he taunted.
Never at peace.
Herheart it ached.
Never did the pain go away.
She denied.
She lied.
She knew the pain.
And very well he did.
The pain was all..
2006-07-22 14:54:19 · 12 answers · asked by Getroman 2 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Other - Arts & Humanities
it's boring
2006-07-22 14:57:15 · answer #1 · answered by Debi 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
For me a poem has to have rhythm. It does not constantly ought to rhyme despite if it incredibly needs to hit my thoughts. i think readability of expression is important as nicely. i do no longer opt to 2d guess what i'm examining approximately. I constantly seek for what I term "poetic gem stones"in the text cloth.
2016-10-08 05:24:40 · answer #2 · answered by catherine 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
This poem seems real deep and I am not sure what you have gone through but you seem to have a low self esteem. Cheer up what ever he did is over now and as it is hard to move passed things that your supposed loved ones have done you need to. But the poem was real well written.
2006-07-22 15:07:51 · answer #3 · answered by Lealea 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Really really Good but the whole sharper redder depper not cut an it :)
2006-07-22 15:03:51 · answer #4 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
it sounds like a girl is pissed of and hates the world. shes depressed. people at school walk by her and dont know her, but that one boy saw her but then he went away. she wants her thoughts of him to go away.breaking up sucks. killing might look good to her right know.
i cant write good for my life, but pretty good, so what does it really mean to you?????
2006-07-22 15:21:55 · answer #5 · answered by delia 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It's very good. Your emotion and pain comes out in this poem. Keep writing if you find it healing!!!
2006-07-22 15:04:20 · answer #6 · answered by Tina K 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
yup, great poem
a broken heart, one of the worst things that can happen to a person
2006-07-22 18:33:33 · answer #7 · answered by Your best friend 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It's good. Minimalistic, plain and simple.
2006-07-22 15:05:41 · answer #8 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
lol..that's me!..just kidding..it's a bit long..
2006-07-25 14:06:06 · answer #9 · answered by Leia Skywalker 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Are you talking about her committing suicide? Thats what it sounds like if so get some help PLEASE!!!!!!
2006-07-22 14:59:59 · answer #10 · answered by colleyshey 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋