Last night I had a dream,
A dream of angels and beautiful things.
In this dream I died.
I looked down and saw the tears you cried.
Don't worry I'm in heaven,
the angels brought me here.
This is the joy that I've been given.
Yet it's brought you only tears.
I weep as I see you,
how your love for me never died.
I see now what was true,
we had a love we had to deny.
As you kneel down and cup your hands,
you pray that I be safe.
You pray that I be in God's land,
with his hope and faith.
But don't worry I'm in heaven,
the angels brought me here.
This is the joy that I've been given.
So wipe away those tears.
I can look into the future,
and see you by my side.
My love for you was always true.
I'll see you when you die.
~Sarah~
2006-07-22 01:59:52 · 12 answers · asked by tricksy 4 in Family & Relationships ➔ Friends
I love your poem, Sarah! How old are you? Did you have an experience with death that moved you to write this? I have a friend whose son died. I will send her your poem. It is both uplighting and insightful. Keep writing!
2006-07-22 02:06:21 · answer #1 · answered by mab5096 7 · 1⤊ 0⤋
I think that you did a good job. I love poetry and write it myself. I think that it takes courage to write out your feelings and experiences out on paper. Oh by the way Ruri V, synonyms are words that mean the same as or close to the same as another word. For example hate is the synonym for abhor, stupid is the synonym for lame, happy is the synonym for joyous. Besides, rhyming is good but you don't have to rhyme in poems so how did she do it wrong?
2006-07-22 09:20:43 · answer #2 · answered by Moon 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
that sounds so nice, poes like that u can always tell they came from the heart. i love 2 right poems, its how i let my feelings out
2006-07-22 09:09:50 · answer #3 · answered by Giorgianna 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
great and somewhat it shows ur creativity. but i would be more greatful to u if u send me this poem and more as u can send to me. hope u wont disappoint me. well me Tapan from India wants to know more about u and ur poetry. so plz mail me at
get_mantra@hotmail.com
2006-07-22 09:05:45 · answer #4 · answered by tapan 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Why does everyone assume that poems have to rhyme, and then they rhyme with lame synoyms that don't even rhyme properly?
2006-07-22 09:03:11 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
I love it. My child father passed away and so did my father, and this poem really touches me. keep it up.
2006-07-22 09:10:51 · answer #6 · answered by kitty29 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
MISTAKES are painful...
But,
years later,
A collection of mistakes is called as EXPERIENCE,
which leads us to...
SUCCESS
Have a successful life
2006-07-22 09:10:33 · answer #7 · answered by Amit G 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
it's lengthy/ hehe;)
nevertheless, it seems like an honest poem; keep on writing poems.
stace\m/,
2006-07-22 09:06:56 · answer #8 · answered by smashmouth 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I Liked It well i kinda have a tear but i like it....Itz so nice....
2006-07-22 09:07:21 · answer #9 · answered by ? 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
hey sarah, this poem is very very beautiful!!! its just gr8!!! very good! :)
2006-07-22 09:02:51 · answer #10 · answered by appy 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋