What do you think of my writing?

Question

Adults say love is special and kids will never understand it.When you love someone you truely care for them.Your heart sayz their the oneand no one else matters to you.When you love someone they're your best friend.Your heart beats unregular because your sonervous around them.You always look your best when you're hanging around them.Love you can find it anywhere even nexted door.I found my 1st love wheni became friends with his sister,but when i'm around these 2 boys all i think is about them.One of them is a close friend of mine.I can tell him anything,he s my best friend that is a guy.Also me and my best friend are crushing on him thats why i don't want to tell/i don't want to screw up two friendships.The second guy is my neighbor/cousin's best friend.He make me smile and happy when he is around.He is a good friend to have.He is 2 years older then me.I know he likes me because he flurts/hits on me when we hang together on the bus.I think he is scared to make a move.It's true

Answer 1

You are good at putting down your feelings on paper. You are able to observe yourself and your reactions. You can find the words to use when you are describing your feelings.
You can also write well in the vernacular. Vernacular means the language of the people you are writing about. An example is: "Also me and my best friend are crushing on him that's why I don't want to tell". Not everyone talks like that, so you are picking up on the way the people you know talk. However, if you want to write for others you will have to explain to them what phases like "crushing on" mean.
I don't know if you just wanted an opinion about your experiences or you wanted a critique on your writing because you want to write stories. If you want to write, as in story or book writing, you are going to have to learn good English grammar and spelling. You need to learn punctuation, when to end sentences, when to start new paragraphs.
Publishers have editors that clean up a writer's writing but if they have to do too much "cleaning up" or can't understand what you are talking about, they'll just send it back to you.
If you're interested in writing as a hobby or profession I would suggest that you start taking writing classes. High School, College, or Special Interest classes are all good ways to get started in writing.
I hope I didn't give you more information than you wanted but I just wanted to tell you that you write well but you need to learn more about the basics of writing.
Good luck no matter what you want.

Answer 2

ok what do you think of mine:



People say they 'find' love, as if it were an object hidden by a rock. But love takes many forms, and it is never the same for any man and woman. What people find then is a certain love.

Love, like rain, can nourish from above, drenching couples with a soaking joy. But sometimes, under the angry heat of life, love dries on the surface and must nourish from below, tending to its roots, keeping itself alive.

Lost love is still love. It takes a different form, that's all. You can't see their smile or bring them food or tousle their hair or move them around a dance floor. But when those senses weaken, another heightens. Memory. Memory becomes your partner. You nurture it. You hold it. You dance with it.