A Sad Winter
I'm wandering through the snow wondering
How animals can sleep all winter
And why can't I do the same with the one I love
For she is nowhere to be found
As I die on the cold cold ground
Carmen A Perrone Jr (1996)
The Question
When I think about you on a quiet fall day
I sit and wonder what I should say
Should I tell you how I feel
Would you believe that I'm for real
Or should I keep it all in
Behind a cheerful concealing grin
Either way I have a fear
That you don't have the same care
But I must speak my mind
And let it all unwind
Because my love for you is strong
And that is my heart's song
Now your answer is the key
Depending how much you love me
Carmen A Perrone Jr (1995)
2006-07-21 17:24:08 · 7 answers · asked by ancient_wolf_13 3 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Other - Arts & Humanities
Hmm Sad Winter was well..um..sad. And it was obviously meant to be. But I think it could have been better if it were longer. The second one : The Question..that one I liked. I really liked it. In fact that one I could imagine being a slow rap love song like what LL Cool J use to do way back when. Keep up the good work!
2006-07-21 17:30:56 · answer #1 · answered by Lady_D 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I especially like the first one. It leaves a lot of questions in my mind. The second one is quite plain and when writing about an over used subject one should be careful and extremely creative. It appears that your writing had improved over the year. (1995 to 1996) Put up something recent.
2006-07-22 00:36:18 · answer #2 · answered by sickcured? 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
The first one stinks. The second one is much better.
2006-07-22 00:37:43 · answer #3 · answered by Linda 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I LOVE THE ONE DATED 1996 ITS WONDERFUL (GIVE YOURSELF A ROUND OF APPLAUSE)
2006-07-22 00:47:36 · answer #4 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
nice, you should do spoken word poetry, ur stuff is nice enough to recite in front of people.
2006-07-22 00:30:11 · answer #5 · answered by landk916 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
SIMPLY BEAUTIFUL!!!!
2006-07-22 00:58:07 · answer #6 · answered by jethot00 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
NAH...I don't think so.....
2006-07-22 00:32:23 · answer #7 · answered by texasgirl5454312 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋