How can i make this sound better/shorter?
- My name is Brooke *
- nearly 15 years of age with 3 years of babysitting experience with children 10 months-10 years old
- Am reliable, punctual, responsible, trustworthy, and a great, loving babysitter
- Currently working towards my CPR certificate, but have general knowledge through my school's first-aid class, CPR, and babysitting
- I have a flexible schedule with reasonable prices (negotiable)
- Will give 100% full attention to your kids
- Will do small house-work (cleaning) while children are asleep
- I also offer to walk dogs, cook simple meals, & home work help
- Available to baby-sit in the * area (local)
Contact me if you have any questions or to check availability at…
Home: *
Cell: *
Email: *
References available upon request
I look forward to hearing from you.
Have a great and safe summer!
2006-07-21 07:04:45 · 9 answers · asked by xoxo 3 in Business & Finance ➔ Small Business
Brooke
15 years of age
3 years of babysitting experience
Experience with children 10 months to 10 years old
Reliable, punctual, responsible, great with children
Working towards CPR certificate
General knowledge through my school's first-aid class and CPR class
Flexible schedule with reasonable prices (negotiable)
Will give 100% attention to your kids
Will do small house-work (cleaning) while children are asleep
Will walk dogs, cook simple meals and help with homework
Available to baby-sit only in the * area (local)
Contact me if you have any questions or to check availability at…
Home: *
Cell: *
Email: *
References available upon request
I look forward to hearing from you.
Have a great and safe summer!
Just eliminated the I's and shortened it up to get the point across better
2006-07-21 07:12:45 · answer #1 · answered by daanzig 4 · 1⤊ 1⤋
My name is Brooke. I'm nearly 15 years old with 3 years of babysitting experiene with children from 10 months-10 years old. I'm very reliable, punctual, responsible, trustworthy, and most importantly, a great, loving babysitter. Kids just love me like I love them!
I'm currently working towards my CPR certificate, so it would be wonderful if you hired me. Even though I don't have this qualification yet, I have a general knowledge of first-aid, CPR, and babysitting from my school experiences.
I have a flexible schedule with reasonable prices, which are negotiable.
Don't think I'm some kind of hack, because I will devote 100% of my attention towards your children, and when the children are asleep, I'll do some simple housework such as cleaning. Not only do I clean, though. I can also walk the dog(s), cook, and help your kids with their homework if they need help (without actually doing it for them, because I understand that they will learn nothing if I do do it for them).
If you live in *, then I'm all yours!
Contact me if you have any questions or to check availability:
Home: *
Cell: *
Email: *
References available upon request.
I look forward to hearing from you. Have a nice summer!
2006-07-21 14:19:13 · answer #2 · answered by hawaiian_shorts91 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Do not need to know your name up front. Not bad but pretty long in newspaper add. Try this one. Need to be more to the point. When people call then tell more about you and your experience.
Experienced Responsible ( your city) Babysitter
I am ____ years old with 3 years baby siting experience 10 mos to to 10 yrs old. I have a flexible schedule with negotiable prices. I have had first aid classes and am working towards getting my CPR certificate. I will do a little house cleaning while children are asleep.
I also offer dog walking, cooking simple meals, and homework tutoring. Contact me ( (your name) at cell:____________, Email_________.
2006-07-21 14:27:02 · answer #3 · answered by TooSweet 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
The only thing I can think of is to provide a different method of stating your age, so that the resume isn't time-sensitive.
Maybe like state your school status instead of your age. Like Graduated from 11th grade in 2005 or something, so that way you won't need to update the resume when you turn 15.
Also, make sure all your bullets are phrased similarly.
2006-07-21 14:13:33 · answer #4 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
That is great don't change a thing. Good Luck
2006-07-21 14:09:50 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Excellent job!!! I wouldn't change anything.
2006-07-21 14:14:55 · answer #6 · answered by J P 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It is just great! leave it as it is.
2006-07-21 14:11:10 · answer #7 · answered by ? 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
leave it how it is...u are really selling yourself here. i like it...i would hire you right now!!!!LOL
2006-07-21 14:09:04 · answer #8 · answered by ♥NICOLE♥ 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
That is perfect!
2006-07-21 14:07:55 · answer #9 · answered by Master Hoyle 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋