just a poem i wrote last week i hope u like it...........?

Question

Am I Pretty Now?


Here comes the ugly one
Looking sad and wearing black
Those stupid fuc*ing preps all laugh
Because she looks so fat

Trying to ignore the comments
She walks, looking at the floor
Since she doesn't say a word
They shout more ugly words

The jocks throw their footballs at her
And the anorexic sluts just laugh
She's teased in science, she teased in p.e
She's even teased in math

Everyday, the same routine,
She runs into her room and cries
She thinks that no one cares
If she just curled up and died

Then one day after normal teasing,
She finally had enough
She couldn't handle all their teasing
And other stupid stuff

She grabbed some lipstick
and put it on her lips
She grabbed her long black skirt
And then started to rip

At the corner of her eye
She spotted a pointy blade
She slashed her wrists until
Her vision started to fade

Suddenly, she fell
Colapsing on a towel
The words carved in her wrists read,

Am I Pretty Now?

when i made it i was thinking about myself and other teens how the mother ******* peeps are such *******

i rote this the night i came back from the hosptial

Answer 1

Wow, that is powerful writing! You have talent! Your message is very clear...hoping you are not going to hurt yourself and if you have any thoughts of doing so, please call someone to bring you to the nearest emergency room, and/or a crisis centre. If this poem is your way of reaching out, you got my attention! I don't know who you are but I care! So please don't hurt yourself, let someone help you, to soothe your emotional scars! Shame on anyone who may have caused you such pain!

Answer 2

Now I laugh
At this egocentric prose.
Whoa is my life
I don't fit in anywhere.

I wear black,
I write in wire-bound notepads.
Thinking I'm unique
And simply misunderstood.

But they're all around us
Goth chicks that sit and pout
Because Daddy works too much
Or Mommy doesn't pay enough attention.

Then the real world strikes
They realize that these things are insignificant
Stop being such a whiny b*tch
Go out and make friends and live life.

And for God's sake, if you're going to kill yourself make sure cut down the stream, not across the river.

Answer 3

Wow. Very dark, with some captivating imagery. I like the final line.

With that said...if this is not just a poem (and they rarely are), then don't let the jocks and preps, or ANYONE, change your view of yourself. Trust me, the "normals" in life don't end up very happy. It's those of us who have a painful past, or a darkness inside, who really know how to appreciate the beauty in life. OK, so high school's no fun, but trust me it gets better for unique people. It gets really boring for normals, unless they know how to break out of that role.

Always remember the strength of your beauty, and of your pain.

Answer 4

It's a great poem. But I sincerrly hope that wasn't a tru story about you. Everyone is beautiful in their own way. Just look at the poem you wrote. It may be a harsh subject, but it's something positive for someone else.And being pretty is only skin deep. Remembe pretty comes from inside.

Answer 5

You should write a poem about atoms. There's some guy in the maths/science section here who wants a 5 stanza poem about atoms. I put a little one in, but I bet you could write a much better one!


Make the atom slash it's wrists :)

Answer 6

If you are going to try to publish this 'poetry' or even give it to someone for free, (or even post it on a public board...), I suggest you learn how to hit the spellcheck button...

It's on the top right side of the box highlighted in blue with a little ABC/checkmark box highlighted in green.

When you click on it, it will show you all the spelling mistakes you have made, before you submit the posting!

Answer 7

Very GOOD, if this about you just hold up your head and look at them back and sing, I don't believe what i hear, Don't believe what i see, If i just close my eye's i can feel the enemy, so i must be an acrobat to talk like this and act like that and i can dream so i will dream out loud and i won't let the BASTAR## grind me down, you know your time is coming round...

Answer 8

if you are over 18 go see a therapist - the negative thoughts are not the springboard for a mentally healthy life - trust me, a stranger.
NO ONE AND NOTHING is worth it.
If you are a minor, then try using the web as a safety release valve.
but no no no suicidal thoughts...

Answer 9

I do like it--it has a lot to say about the ongoing, perpetually present issue of bullying. Quite talented. Why don't you keep writing?

Answer 10

Wow! I didn't like it at the beginning but it's interesting. I have a friend who's anorexic who writes things like that.