advice for a cover letter?

Question

I've started with what I'm studying at uni now & that i'm interested in the application of the subject in their job.

Paragraph 2 I've asked about the possiblilty of work experience with them during September

Ended with Please let me know if anything is avaliable
thank you
Yours ....


Is this good / boring / how do I improve it?

Answer 1

Kiss their anuses. Tell them how badly you want to work for them. And the supposed job skills you want to acquire and expand while an employee there.

Answer 2

As I tell my students in my job-hunting classes, the KEY to a cover letter is that the purpose of it is to briefly say why you're right for the job and to get them to look at your resume for more details.

It should be short, sweet, and to the point. Paragraph

1) The job you're applying for, how you heard about it, and the fact that you've included your resume.

2) A brief overview of your background--work history, education, and skills. This could possibly be extended to a second paragraph if you have lots of experience, but no more than 2 paragraphs in length.

3) Your willingness discuss your background and interest in employment in more detail, and availability for being interviewed. Be sure to include how you can be contacted so they don't have look at your resume for it.

4) The thank you for taking the time to consider you for possible employment. Also a good idea to restate why you're the one for that job, but make it very short (1 or 2 sentences).

That's all!

Answer 3

Needs improvement. Doesn't sound from your description like it's going to get anyone's attention - doesn't sound like you're very enthusiastic about working there. Blah/boring, yes, unfortunately.

You've kind of come at it from your perspective - which is natural - but you are marketing yourself as a potential employee right now. So think MARKETING!

Describe the W-I-I-F-M - What's In It For Them

You've described what you think working for them will do for you (advance your knowledge of your subject). They may be kind people, but they really don't care what working for them will do for you. They care what it will do FOR THEM!

Next time (or you could try these people again), look at it from their perspective. What you are studying must be relevant to what they do or you wouldn't have approached them. So, what do you think would be the benefits to them of hiring you? Put those in the letter.

Try to sound interested, interesting, and enthusiastic about working there.

Close with something like - "I look forward to speaking with someone (get a name off the Website if you can) about opportunities in your organization (or company). I'll call next Wednesday (or whenever) to set up an appointment to come in for a talk." Pick a day that gives them enough time to receive and to read your letter, but not so much time that they'll have forgotten you.

Try to drink a cup of strong coffee before you write your next letter. You question here is kind of passive, and that is not going to get you anywhere.

Good luck!

Answer 4

Try aiming the letter at the company/business you are writing too. Say you are interested in their product or service and that you have the qualities they are looking for. Then list some of your qualities, hard working, dedicated, quick learner and that you want to work for a successful organisation like theirs.

This way you are saying that you really want to work for them. You are saying they NEED you.

End with something like..... I look forward to hearing from you soon.

Answer 5

Did you highlight your skills and how they might apply to the job you are seeking?

Check out this article on Cover Letters and see how yours measures up.

Answer 6

first sentence of letter must grab readers attention...and not with some sort of silly gimmick...this is serious stuff, make the reader want to go further.

companies are in business to make money...how can you make a positive contribution...even with little or no experience

Answer 7

Offer to work for a week for free. Seriously.