Do you know how to describe sex in a modern novel?

Question

After this posting its on to writing more of my auto biographical novel and my first meeting with dad2. I posted a page on Y but you hated my attempt to make it more romantic and I took it off. In reality it was really was just a steamy drunken bunk up in Corfu but we met up again in the UK and it lasted until dad3 came into the picture. It is semi autobiographical so I dont want to sound like a slag when my Nigel is old enough to read it. It was romantic in its way perhaps not moon and twinkling stars in the abyss of the night that you yawned at. So without graphically describing what we did and leaving out the starry night and hoping not to write Chick Lit or win the bad sex writing award as my tutor tells me, how far do I go? I don't want to read other novels in case I get influenced and copy them.

Answer 1

You can be funny

He raised his glass and whispered: "Do you want to do to me what I want to do to you?"
There are different types of love. All my life I have yearned for the perfect soul mate and the all consuming love. I had drunk away my higher ideals and I succumbed to Eros. After all Corfu is his home ground. I didn't hesitate I grabbed my bag, grabbed dad2 and we staggered to the boat. Getting undressed was hard as we were rocking and the boat was rolling. Apart from the back seat of a mini I have never been so uncomfortable as in the single bed.

Next morning I woke up with a raging headache and when dad2 bent over to kiss me good morning I rushed outside and hurled over the rails.


You could be subtle.

Dad2 waited for me in the shadows. He grabbed me and we kissed. We shared the strange creosote flavour of the Retsina wine on our tongues. Without a word I lead him along the quay to the yacht. I still dream of that night....

The next morning I felt like the proverbial cat that has eaten the cream. No guilt, just the joy of being a contented animal enjoying all the animal pleasures.

The rest of the trip

Or you can be graphic

I've edited the juicy bits.

I XXXXXXX, he XXXXXXX we XXXXXXX i grabbed XXXXXXX he
XXXXXXX my XXXXXXX. My thin silk blouse tore. I XXXXXXX XXXXXXX his XXXXXXX XXXXXXX XXXXXXX XXXXXXX. He pounded my XXXXXXX XXXXXXX XXXXXXX XXXXXXX XXXXXXX XXXXXXX. Swinging from the chandelier we XXXXXXX XXXXXX XXXXXXX XXXXXXX XXXXXXX XXXXXXX XXXXXXX XXXXXXX XXXXXXX XXXXXXX XXXXXXX . It was incredible. I pulled his hair back and XXXXXXX XXXXXXX XXXXXXX XXXXXXX XXXXXXX . He grabbed XXXXXXX XXXXXXX XXXXXXX XXXXXXX XXXXXXX. He pounded XXXXXXX XXXXXXX XXXXXXX XXXXXXX XXXXXXX Hours later we XXXXXXX XXXXXXX XXXXXXX XXXXXXX XXXXXXX XXXXXXX XXXXXXX XXXXXXX XXXXXXX XXXXXXX

Answer 2

stop worrying and just ' do it' .

describe sex in a modern novel ? should be no different than how you are writing in any case don't be worried about the fact its about 'sex'.

...most people that use the word 'fcuk' ( for example) sound like some idiot on 'big brother' but then there was e.e.cummings and d.h.lawrence. where do you fit ?

t.s.eliot was a christian but his poetry is mind blowing. where as 'thought for the day' radio 4. is stuffed with such mental blandness that it puts me into a mainiac rage.

if you feel things deeply. just say it with your heart and head in your own way. explore your word world.

all the best .David

Answer 3

good for you, write on your own experiences. I'm afraid i havent seen anything you have put up before but i guess in writitng you just have to be honest while embellishing on the facts.
and dont ask the general public for advice cos were feckin idiots.
p.s, wots de dad 1 and dad 2 about?

Answer 4

It should be Whimsical and light just verily a hint of sex .Playing on words so poetically with a rhythm slowly, ever so slowly building up to a point where the words are no longer words but, feelings of emotions mixed with LOVE, LUST and hunger.....Thank you

Answer 5

You are the writer. Do based in your thoughts, believes and lies.
You can choose pssion, poetic, illusory, real, phylosophical dense of just happened.
Choose you style, think about how you see it and write it. Run away from standards. You are writing. You are free to do anything.

Answer 6

Subsequently, we were able to confirm that certain biological actions and reactions do occur without the prescence of stars and moonlight.

Answer 7

Ask dad 4

Answer 8

Describe what you were thinking rather than what you were doing , ie "he was so strong i felt i would never have to fear anything again while he was with me" etc etc

Answer 9

lusted, knew each other, spiritual caress, bodies entwined.

Answer 10

passion