A friend suppose to be there thru thick an thin
a friend suppose to say you can do it again.
A friend suppose to be there for everything at least thats what i thought, my friend died awhile ago now whose goin to help me climb that rope i thought when friends die god send a new i guess thats over its ended im through. When my friend died apart of me died 2 i want yall to feel the pain and agony i went though if you have friends stick by there side cuz noone knows when its that time.I hope this world hurry up and end cuz im tired of waiting for my replacment called friend.
2006-07-14 06:35:59 · 20 answers · asked by janail_boo 2 in Entertainment & Music ➔ Other - Entertainment
I ALMOST FEEL SORRY FOR YOU. HOW LONG AGO DID THIS HAPPEN? FIND HAPPINESS WITHIN YOURSELF IF YOU FEEL AS THOUGH YOU CANNOT FIND ANOTHER GOOD FRIEND. DON'T LOOK FOR THIS FRIEND TO BE JUST LIKE THE ONE YOU LOST THOUGH. AND DON'T DOUBT GOD AT ALL. NEVER SAY YOU THOUGHT HE WAS SUPPOSED TO DO SOMETHING CAUSE TRUST ME, GOD HAS YOUR BACK IF YOU BELIEVE. YOU WILL GET TROUGH THIS BUT YOU MUST QUIT FEELING SORRY FOR YOURSELF. GOD BLESS YOU.
2006-07-14 06:47:03 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 1⤋
I read what others wrote don't listen to the negative comments because poems can be about feelings or whatever you want. You write with artist license when you write a poem but to get give you constructive critizism you need to clean up your lines so that it flows better. Your content is fine just needs a bit of reworking. Don't give up!!!! keep writing!!!
2006-07-14 06:46:52 · answer #2 · answered by miss-snoopy 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I really didn't care for it too much. It didn't have a flowing pattern to it. To me your "poem" is more of a cry for help. You should seek professional care if you are writing this stuff that means that you feel this stuff as well. So, look into getting help and get help soon.
2006-07-14 06:39:35 · answer #3 · answered by navymilitarybrat76 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It's good, but morbid. I wish you would talk to a grief counselor.
It is tough when a friend dies, especially when you feel like you are having to deal with the grief alone.
2006-07-14 06:38:45 · answer #4 · answered by housefullofboys3 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Your bold! It was Dry. It sounds as if a child wrote it. DON'T BE DISCOURAGED! Time, not syntax makes a great poet and writer. Ever heard of Hemingway, and Faulkner they were poor spellers and had poor grammar. Just practice, practice,practice.
2006-07-14 07:10:50 · answer #5 · answered by marcus93257 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Is there a few words such as "is" missing. Bit gloomy but paints a nice picture.
2006-07-14 06:38:36 · answer #6 · answered by brogdenuk 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
um no not really you got a little extra with the world ending statement and kinda scared me but good try....... =Z
2006-07-14 06:42:27 · answer #7 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
No it is awful it makes my mind go sick so don't ever i mean ever and when i mean it i really mean it so don't put a poem here or i will **** you up.
2006-07-14 06:40:22 · answer #8 · answered by MO WADE (LETS GO HEAT!!!) 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Dis is not a poem, its a funeral speech
2006-07-14 06:41:55 · answer #9 · answered by LP 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
it started out good then i just dont know what happend but its ok if this is how your realy feel its good to get your feelings out there
2006-07-14 06:39:46 · answer #10 · answered by trouble 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋