need help rewriting this sentence excluding all jargon and cloudy language. To maintain a state of high-level wellness, one should use a wooden interdental stimulator at least once a day and avoid spending time at fake-bake salons.
This is for my College Composition Class.
Thank you very much for your help.
2006-07-13 19:53:23 · 7 answers · asked by monchichie2005 2 in Education & Reference ➔ Higher Education (University +)
To stay healthy one should brush their teeth at least once a day and stay away from tanning salons.
2006-07-13 19:56:33 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
The "wooden interdental stimulator" is probably a wordy way of saying "tooth-pick". The "fake-bake salons" looks like jargon for a "tanning salon".
"To maintain a state of high-level wellness" is a verbose form of "To stay healthy", though the latter is nearly a cliche.
It's more cryptic than cloudy to my eye, and of questionable logic since dental floss and brushing are better than tooth-picks, and no form of deliberate radiant tanning including natural sunlight is very good for one's skin. Nice to have a touch of tan from being outdoors, but who needs skin cancer.
I'd come back with "To stay healthy, floss and brush your teeth regularly, and moderate your exposure to sunshine."
It would sound less lame with a context. If American English isn't your native language, you might benefit from watching TV because most people are strongly influenced by the way words are used there. On the other hand, TV can rot the mind, so moderate your exposure to that too!
2006-07-14 03:06:59 · answer #2 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
The daily use of a wooden interdental stimulator and avoiding tanning salons will maintain a state of high-level wellness.
2006-07-14 03:01:15 · answer #3 · answered by francescaj7 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It sounds quite "ley" already. The only thing you could change to simplify it is the beginning: "To keep healthy, one should..."
"Wooden interdental stimulator." Is that the techical term for tongue-suppressor?
2006-07-14 02:59:00 · answer #4 · answered by perfectlybaked 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
To be healthy, use a dental stimulator daily and don't go to tanning salons.
2006-07-14 02:56:18 · answer #5 · answered by Gestalt 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
To be healthy, you should brush your teeth daily and avoid tanning salons?
2006-07-14 02:57:37 · answer #6 · answered by Shawne & Lexi 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
examine yourself everyday and dont let other do it for you
2006-07-14 02:58:43 · answer #7 · answered by silverironrain 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋