Thy love is like da well deeper to da end
Tis it never stops evolving till eternity
Thy love never dwells and gets steeper
Tis keeps involving with every aching moment
2006-07-13 16:02:18 · 3 answers · asked by Konstantia S 2 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Other - Arts & Humanities
In my opinion. Umm.... yeah, no. Its kinda confusin. It has a Shakespearien and slang sound, to the lingo u used. They dont sound good 2gether. It also needs some more punctuation to help its flow. Punctuation to help its understandability in terms of readability and for readers to feel ur emotion. I dont know if it was misspellin, or lack of a dictionary and/or thuasarus, but some words seemed wrong.
Try this =
Thy love is like a well. (or) Thy love is like thyn well.
Deeper to the end.
Tis it never stopping? (or) Does it not stop?
Evolving till eternity?
Thy love never dwells
And gets steeper. (or) Or gets steeper.
Tis (or) It keeps evolving with every aching moment.
Thats just my 2 cents. Not tryin to **** on ur parade er anything. But everybody has there own style. I like the Shakespearien style myself.
2006-07-13 18:47:10 · answer #1 · answered by ? 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
That isn't a sonnet. A sonnet is a fourteen-line poem in iambic pentameter with a carefully patterned rhyme scheme. Cute though.
2006-07-13 23:06:59 · answer #2 · answered by Sappho 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
That's a Quatrain, not a Sonnet.
2006-07-15 00:06:07 · answer #3 · answered by Lee 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋