I made a babysitting flyer! Tell me how you like it and what to change or add.?

Question

Summer Babysitting
- My name is Brooke *. I am 14, soon to be 15
- I have 3 years of babysitting experience
- Baby-sit children 10 months-10 years
- Live locally in * Knolls
- I am trustworthy, honest, reliable, loyal, responsible, and a great, loving babysitter
- Have general knowledge through a special class in school in first aid, CPR, and babysitting (infants and children) and will be certified in the future.
- Call me to see when I am available.
- Negotiable on the price per hour (depends on how many children)
- Pet friendly
- Will give 100% full attention to your kids.
- Will also bring small, non-messy activities for the children
- Will do small house work (cleaning and cook simple meals)
- I am willing to work anywhere in the * area
- My mother is a nursery school teacher at * (Margo*)


Contact me for more information or questions at…


Home:
Cell:
Email:
References available!
I look forward to hear from you!
Have a great and safe summer!

Answer 1

Might want to change the format (not bullet-point), and leave out the parenthesis, use "for example" instead. You don't need to mention every single thing you are capable of and are willing to do. Only list your MAJOR points and let the customers call and ask about the rest. If you try to list too much information, you might seem desperate or that you're trying to look more qualified than you really are. List your qualities in order of importance. And you don't need to mention that your mom is a nursery school teacher because that doesn't really effect how good YOU are with kids (unless you go to work with her a lot and help out, in which case you can say that you "volunteer at a nursery school"). Keep it a little bit vague but clear.

Make your name, age and other general information in paragraph form. Also include a large picture of yourself (very clear picture! Doesn't have to be color, but definately not blurry black & white).

And leave out the "general knowledge" of CPR. It's better to levae it out completely than have someone doubt your actually abilities. If it were my child, I might wonder WHAT she knew about CPR because it's very different depending on what the person/kid is choking on, how old they are, and many other factors (I'm certified in CPR). If you would like to mention it though, contact your local YMCA or other health-related place and ask if they could include you in their next CPR testing. It's a fun class, you learn a lot, and you are certified for up to 2 or 3 years.


Just some suggestions since I'm an English freak sometimes and I love to help proofread and correct things for people (that's why I'm going to be a teacher lol). !!!!GOOD LUCK!!!!

PS: I think you mean "I look forward to hearING from you" at the end. You left off the "ing". Just wanted to point that out because it's very easy to read-over by accident. I didn't even notice it the first two times I read it. Just didn't want you to copy and paste it like that or something and make a ton of fliers with a silly little honest mistake like that :-)

Answer 2

Looks good! A few small changes I would make are:

1. Remove the sentence "call me to see when I am available" (they'll do that anyway).

2. Schedule your CPR training now, and put the completion date on your flyer ( Will be CPR certifited on August 4, 2006). After you complete the certification, you can change it to "CPR certified".

3. Instead of "I look forward to hear from you!" put "I look forward to hearing from you!".

4. Determine your price per hour/ per child and put it on the flyer. Remove the "negotiable on the price per hour" sentence and replace it with your rate per child.

5. Do you have your own transportation? WIll you ride your bike or can your mom take you to your jobs? If so, put "Have my own transportation" as a bullet on your flyer.

6. I would remove the bullet "pet friendly" or move it lower down on the list. You want the most important things at the top of the list, and the less important ones down lower.

To be very safe, you should give this only to people you know, and then only work through references....it is much safer and you won't likely get weird people. You might want to ask your Mom if she can post your flyer at her work or email it to her friends.

Good luck to you, Brooke!!

Answer 3

That is so cool. I think it's great. Maybe a little too long, but just be sure that the headline is bold and bright. When I was about 13 I started a little nursery school in my parent's garage. I took about 5 preschoolers for 2 hours on 3 afternoons a week and did fun stuff with them. Back in those days I was paid 50cents per hour per child so I made a whopping $5.00! I went on to become a "real" teacher and loved it. I forgot all about that time in my life until I read your ad. You sound like an enterprising young lady! Good luck and enjoy!

Answer 4

This is actually very good.
I have a 6 and 3 year old and I would hire you!

Answer 5

That Looks Good To Me!!

Answer 6

Pretty good but add your price.