So Im a film student and trying to write my first feature length movie. My idea starts with a normal family man, wife and 2 young children, 6 and 8 lets say. He goes to walk the dog with his son. when he comes back, he sees his wife and daughter are dead. He runs over to see what is wrong, and is obviously freaking out. Then his son comes in and he tells his son to call 911. He goes back to his wife, then looks back at his son and he is dead. Right when they show the dead son, it cuts to him waking up in a cold sweat. It was just a dream. Then it is revealed that he is in a mental institution. The rest of the movie is him dealing with the other patients, trying to get out and trying to figure out why he is there, he of course doesnt think anything is wrong with his family, it was just a dream. Then, through dreams and flashbacks it is revealed that his family IS dead, and he killed them. In the end he goes a crazy and is strapped to a bed mumbling to himself. Like it? Dont steal it!
2006-07-13 05:23:25 · 18 answers · asked by Daniel K 2 in Entertainment & Music ➔ Movies
havent seen gothika. it looked pretty terrible. Lets just say im trying to write a good version of it. then
2006-07-13 05:28:43 · update #1
Hmm, sounds a bit too much like a combination of Gothika and The i Inside. You should see the two before you start writing, if you decide to use this story. It would be really easy to duplicate these movies exactly while you're trying to do something new, and not even realize it, so see them so you can try to avoid that. Ever since the success of The Sixth Sense, movies like this have been too pervasive, you need to toss in a bit of metaphorical curve ball. Maybe even change the time period and set it in an offbeat place, also the children should be older ( 8 and 17 and 15, two sons one daughter), and it shouldn't have any "insane" factor everyone always thinks of that kind of "oh well he was crazy" ending as a crappy easy out so you don't have to explain anything, unless it's a truly good film like the Boston strangler, you should make the problem someone external tormenting the family, show the father in prison and play out the story from the beginning through his mind, but don't make him crazy, make him mournful and strong, even though the bad guys killed his whole family and he somehow gets blamed.... you can figure out the rest... the mom should be very wholesome and nice... adds a bit more regret on the viewers side... hope that helps....
2006-07-13 07:53:38 · answer #1 · answered by ThoroughThoreau 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Sounds boring and predictable. Sorry, but there are plenty of movies out there like this one. If you really are a film student, I hope you have better things to produce than this. If not, a film career is not for you. You'll want to stick with operating a camera, or editing, or script coordinating. At least then you'll be able to make a living. Seriously, if you think this idea is "really good," then you do NOT have what it takes. Save yourself the years of futility and go a different direction NOW.
Me <-- Seven years in the film business and now doing something totally different.
2006-07-13 12:30:59 · answer #2 · answered by Neerdowellian 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It could be good. However, it is a little too similar to Gothika with Halle Berry. Maybe change things a bit...for example, the guy could keep switching back and forth from the mental institution to being with his family so he doesn't know which is real and which is fantasy.
2006-07-13 12:26:52 · answer #3 · answered by The Girl With the Eyes of Gold 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
that sounds like a really good movie! i would suggest that you make sounds while having them walk in the door and when the son dies. like a soft gunshot or something like that to make it more exciting when that happens. i do like the ending though when he figures out he killed them. in the end have the audience have a clear thought of maybe why the guy killed his family. make it pretty clear but still on the edge. you are on a path to success man!
2006-07-13 12:36:08 · answer #4 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
It sounds like Gothika without the haunting part. Not very original. But could be good if you tweeked it a bunch.
2006-07-13 12:27:38 · answer #5 · answered by Lilel 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I love these kind of movies but dont make it too predictable and change it a bit it is a little like gothica. Write it so its a little scary and make it so maybe that he is not the killer that the person you least expect is the killer i like those kids of movies that keep you guessing.
2006-07-13 12:33:12 · answer #6 · answered by Lety 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It could be good or it could suck, depends on how its directed, if it keeps the suspense and no one knows the ending it and it ends up with a Sixth Sense like twist it might work out. GO FOR IT!
2006-07-13 12:32:09 · answer #7 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Sorry, but too predictable.
I knew he killed them the moment you said he wakes up in a mental hospital.
2006-07-13 12:27:11 · answer #8 · answered by Victoria 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
i'd see it definatly...but it kind of reminds me of The Jacket with Adrian Brody and Keira Knightly just minus the time travel part(awesome movie if u havent seen it)
2006-07-13 12:31:17 · answer #9 · answered by Hypnotiq 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
i think it would be a really cool movie to watch.. it reminds me of the movie The Butterfly Effect, with the flashbacks. it would be one of those films that you would have to watch a couple times to fully get the general jist of the movie..... i say go for it!!!!
2006-07-13 12:27:13 · answer #10 · answered by Jess 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋