sit in 1 spot, drink on what spot, on a glass,
watch birds fly, if only that was u,
watch where u step, watch what u say, watch how much you pay,
you feel like u could fly away.
wait for tomorrow,u cant wait to get home, cant wait to see your loved 1.
u like to reveive a letter, u cant wait to get better.
when u try to avoid but u cant refuse,
when u try to win but then you lose, when u try to get rid of your blues, and hope for some good news,
was this meant to be.
u try to be something that your not, have u ever said something to someone, and then forgot, and never knew how the person felt, do you believe in fait,
when you do something that you truly regret, when you say something, that u should never have said, and now you relise how that person felt,
everyone makes mistakes, and everyones heart gets broken, and these words that you have spoken,has a dozon meanings,
u will be better in the end just come & take a walk with me my friend, i'll show you your way.
2006-07-12 00:46:55 · 8 answers · asked by Anonymous in Arts & Humanities ➔ Books & Authors
I think you should find another way of expressing yourself.
2006-07-12 00:49:57 · answer #1 · answered by Mickle 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
see toddler its prety cool yet a number of elements want too a lot of correction shop on writing and strengthen i m also a author and yah were given 7 trphes in a million year so i m extremely experensed from 4 year soo goo onn i even write songs,poem and rhym on particular day so dont ideas . i know that it really is extremely valuable expertise that all and dissimilar dont have it soo i say goo on that i say u r brialiant(brlant)
2016-11-01 21:58:29 · answer #2 · answered by ? 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
This peom is well written you do haw a few cool little rythms but you do have a couple of mispellings here and there like fait is spelled fate. But I do like your poem.
2006-07-12 00:55:37 · answer #3 · answered by dragonfire 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Whats a vogon mean?
Your poem is okay, i give it 4/10
2006-07-12 00:56:51 · answer #4 · answered by Paris 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
romaticism, i like it but you should probably write better nothing is worst than a badly written, oorly spelled oeam and whats with all the "u"s.
2006-07-12 06:19:12 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
cliche + another cliche + and another one
too open, too bad, shouldn;t be called a poem
2006-07-12 03:27:05 · answer #6 · answered by Solveiga 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I liked it....makes me wonder about you....makes me wonder about myself, do we all feel this way? Are we all so alike?
2006-07-12 04:59:40 · answer #7 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Are you a Vogon?
2006-07-12 00:49:55 · answer #8 · answered by something'srotten 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋