my poem? Please don't be rude or I'll report you. If you don't like it, please state why... I only accept CONSTRUCTIVE critism.
I called it "Hidden Amity."
A crash of thunder shakes my body.
A bolt of lightning shocks my mind.
Trickles of raindrops kiss my skin,
Cool breezes whisper in my ear.
From all of the countless memories cherished each day,
Hugs from the benevolent wind,
The touch of the blazing sun,
The sight of the shimmering snow,
And the serenity of the fallen rain...
Amity hidden behind the silhouettes
of the graceful clouds.
2006-07-11 19:07:36 · 2 answers · asked by Anonymous in Arts & Humanities ➔ Other - Arts & Humanities
I love it. It has a meaning, it flows perfectly from one verse to another, and it keeps the entire idea without rambling. It brings all these things to life in the imagination and creates an image in my mind that is both beautiful and a bit edgy, with a serene ending. It's marvelous, keep up the great work! ♥♥♥
2006-07-11 19:13:17 · answer #1 · answered by save_up_your_tears 4 · 2⤊ 2⤋
I thing it is sooo relaxing for strest out People!!!
2006-07-12 02:15:10 · answer #2 · answered by Pretty Princess 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋