what do you think of my page thingy?

Question

check this out and plz tell me if its any good.....its my first one im still wrkin on it but i want an opinion before i put more time in it.......

http://mbsz.bravehost.com/

ok i think i did what every one of you told me to do..What now? its my first time and i am doing it for my buss class...I am suppose to sell it to people now. sort of like people reading it and actually writting on the site.

Answer 1

The layout is quite good and I like the narrow form. The background is smooth and easily adjusted to. The one problem I have is the chat-speak. If you ever want to be taken seriously you need to use coherent words. "u" and "plz" make it difficult for many people to read. You and please on the other hand are words that have been used for hundreds of years, most of us in English speaking countries find them simple and easy to understand.

Over all I liked you system, please do not take any offense, but you will never be fully accepted using chat-speak.

I almost forgot to mention, your use of comic-sans as a font was interesting, unheard of as far as I know. A very nice addition.

Answer 2

Get and use spell checker....you have some bad errors in the first paragraph and thus you look and sound like an idiot. Do not use abbreviations, use words.

Answer 3

i dont know if the font fits. that and the focus is kind of wierd, you always want to make it obvious where you want people to look