her bouquet cleaved his hardened shell
and fondled his muscled heart
he embibed her glistening spell
just before the other shoe fell
pretty good huh?
2006-07-10 11:11:17 · 11 answers · asked by william the wizard 3 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Books & Authors
What does "embibed" mean? Did you mean "imbibed"?
2006-07-22 09:27:58 · answer #1 · answered by Bentley 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
would be even better if it had a line before the last. And, yes maybe another last line. For example:
her bouquet cleaved his hardened shell
and fondled his muscled heart
he imbibed her in a glistening spell
tulip, rosebud impart
just before the other shoe fell
the condom ripped apart
Last line could be
Love hastened it's depart ( if you are serious )
2006-07-22 05:22:16 · answer #2 · answered by dws2711 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I was good and horny until the last line, sorry. No disrespect though I actually did like it, I just got lost with the last line. I've got much love for poetry so keep it coming o.k.
2006-07-10 18:39:16 · answer #3 · answered by Kimmie 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I really like the last line of this poem, but I am not a huge fan of rhyme like this because it sounds too whimsical.
2006-07-24 17:30:58 · answer #4 · answered by bookgirl 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I don't like the last line. Have it rhyme with 'heart'.
2006-07-10 20:15:18 · answer #5 · answered by harmonslide 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I'd skip the comments
2006-07-23 21:31:03 · answer #6 · answered by Leah nora 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
A little dirty and sexual. It's good, kudos, and your powers of description are, can I say, pretty interesting.
2006-07-10 18:18:16 · answer #7 · answered by Opinion Girl 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
a little sexual and it only rhymed anyone can do that your not good so go and read a book!!!
2006-07-10 19:06:07 · answer #8 · answered by Samantha S 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Interesting, it has sexual overtones.
2006-07-10 18:14:55 · answer #9 · answered by ? 3 · 0⤊ 1⤋
if you say so
2006-07-24 14:13:26 · answer #10 · answered by Bullmoose 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋