no family to lean on
no place to call home
no one to talk to
no one to understand
scared to speak
not one single friend
so far from the people who know you
so close to the people who dont
just want to run to them
but so much pride you know you wont
breaking down inside with **** left unsaid
the one person you knew the most
can no longer be read
trapped inside a life
almost feels sureal
but this is reality
and today this is how i feel
strugglling with my new best friend
which is now paper and a pen
cant even be honest while im writing
scared to read what i wrote
trying to live like this
just wanting to learn to cope
harder and harder it gets every day
to think what i want
and speak what i want to say
dont want to fight or argue
never was able
cant deal well with stress
my hearts to fragile
my mind so unstable
tears falling so fast i cant win
my minds yelling be strong
but i cant hold them in
destruction is a *****
and we all go through it
i just hope somedayto get out of it
because its tearing us apart
and hurting my heart
theres only so many chips it can take
untill it is a totall break
theres already some there so please dont take to long
dont turn our realtionship into another sad song
2006-07-10 07:57:27 · 13 answers · asked by sadbear420 1 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Philosophy
Look for some patterns and clean up the flow, perhaps something along these lines, but make them your own.
I struggle with my paper and pen
Scared to read what I write
Emptiness is my new best friend
A shadow afraid of the light
No family to lean on
No place to call home
No one to talk to
I’m now all alone
No hope for tomorrow
No plans for today
Expecting only more sorrow
Is all I can say
2006-07-10 08:17:15 · answer #1 · answered by Rabbit 7 · 2⤊ 1⤋
Very sad and very deep. If YOU wrote this then obviously it came from deep within your soul. Not to worry. A lot of us have been in the same place at some point in our lives. There is hope and all bad times will pass. Just remember that EVERYTHING happens for a reason and there can ALWAYS be a positive outcome no matter how terrible a situation may seem. Learn not only from your mistakes, but form other peoples' mistakes as well. I know this is cliche, but what doesn't kill us only makes us stronger. Believe me, I know.
2006-07-10 08:08:01 · answer #2 · answered by Shelby67grl 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Shares many problems of modern music : it's too anchored in the feelings of the creator to appeal to anybody else. Writing subjective poems is a wierd balancing act. You write from the heart, so the feelings expressed must be real, but you mustn't write them for yourself. You must find the thing wich is common both in your suffering and in that of the world and express it.
2006-07-10 08:02:54 · answer #3 · answered by ? 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
You are apparently alienated from the people around you. Are you away from home for the first time, or living in a new city or something?
You seem depressed - get some medication. It does help.
2006-07-10 08:03:52 · answer #4 · answered by rlw 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Its a good start. try to insert some metaphor to throw people off a little, keep them guessing what you really mean
2006-07-10 08:24:17 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Looks like you need to find your spiritual self. take a look inside of you.
2006-07-10 08:08:45 · answer #6 · answered by ? 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
There's a difference between a suicide note and a poem...
2006-07-10 08:02:38 · answer #7 · answered by HotRod 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I like it and I'm not much of a poetry kind of person.
2006-07-10 08:05:14 · answer #8 · answered by tacokitty 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
bad poem. Shouldn't be called a poem. too open to be a poem, too many cliches.
2006-07-10 08:01:02 · answer #9 · answered by Solveiga 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I think you need some anti-depressants.
2006-07-10 08:01:01 · answer #10 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋