not a poem....just thoughts of a new girl
***who is this girl that has kept my mind and heart in complete wonder? i scarcely know a thing about her, yet i'm stumbling upon reason after reason to find her out. oh, her laughter, that composes a gorgeous smile that expands softly across her face, rings out like that of an angel's song. how i wish she'd discern my adoration for her eyes that are gentler than the summer morning breeze surfing across the sands of a calm desert shore. the image of her standing there with her hair behind her and the colors of the sunset decorating her glowing skin is one of which i would hope to not imagine some day but rather set my eyes on. so, who is this girl that is even still keeping my mind and always my heart in complete attentitive wonder?****
be easy
2006-07-10 06:00:50 · 30 answers · asked by playaninstrument 3 in Entertainment & Music ➔ Polls & Surveys
Wow....You just blew that one out of the park....I'd give it a 15....she must be a very pretty, lovely girl.
2006-07-10 06:18:32 · answer #1 · answered by itty 7 · 1⤊ 3⤋
7
2006-07-10 06:02:49 · answer #2 · answered by Cody 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I aswered your question before and i'll answer it again not just for points but becasue i think this is one of the best things i've read out of all the other stuff you've posted before. If you plan to give it to a girl she is very lucky because this is the most amazing i've ever read it's romanitc and sweet and can defenitly make a girl weak in the knees. Your thoughts are great and i hope you post more poems, songs, or Your thoughts because i really like reading them. : ) Your're really good at this and i hope your dream of becoming a singer and having a perfect marrige are fulfilled. : )
2006-07-10 06:04:23 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Its great-8 1/2
2006-07-10 06:24:12 · answer #4 · answered by Chocolate Lover♥ 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
A Romantic 7.
2006-07-10 06:05:07 · answer #5 · answered by Mom of 5 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Very Good i give it a 9 1/2
2006-07-10 06:04:34 · answer #6 · answered by Nikki 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It isn't bad. I wouldn't say you were a born poet. If someone handed this to me I would think they were stalking me.
It doesn't hold my attention and I think that is because it has a lack of correct punctuation.
I think a little fine tuning and you have a good poem.
about 6 out of 10
2006-07-10 06:07:07 · answer #7 · answered by serveduphot 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
for its technical content and flow...5 - needs a little work in the beginning....also the ending is too open.
however, most people these days could give a crap about the writing when they read something mushy. she'll like it, unless she's an intellectual type; then she'll think it's cute but nothing spectacular.
2006-07-10 06:03:49 · answer #8 · answered by jimvalentinojr 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
enhance the hair extremely and get Contax u will seem extra acceptable. umm get some mucles, study 2 placed on extra acceptable outfits, and study how 2 smile lol. hi and what i discussed up there dont be mad at me u advised me 2 be trustworthy. take yet another image even as u replace ur seem kk. bye hav relaxing tryin 2 be warm
2016-10-14 07:43:13 · answer #9 · answered by ? 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
WOW--Lucky Girl. To have someone that admires her as much as you do. It is so refreshing to know that chivalry is not dead. I think it was great you could find such wonderful words to say about your feelings for a girl. GOOD LUCK to you.
2006-07-10 06:12:06 · answer #10 · answered by skynickie 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I love it, really I do, I'll give a 9 for that.
that -1 is you have to space out your words, the body is good, but everything is crowded together.
2006-07-10 06:05:34 · answer #11 · answered by <333 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋