Emotions
July 7,2006
My emotions
they are still so raw
raw from them
from what I saw.
I can still see the expression on his face
I can still feel him
his kisses I taste.
The look in his eyes
is truly unforgettable
I knew in that moment
our bond was breakable.
Its hard to say goodbye
to the way we were
the memories
they should last a lifetime
but I will still be living with regret
with what ifs on my mind.
All the things I wish we were
are all the things you have with her.
Its hard to think
of all the wasted years
all the heartbreak
shattered tears.
Now I have to deal
with all the things
emotionally I feel.
All the love
I still have inside
through my eyes
its so hard to hide.
I wish I had him back in my arms
I wish he was still here
to wow me with his charm.
These emotions
are taking my all
I can still hear his voice
from his recent phone call.
I want to let go
really I do
but I cannot forget
all we've been through.
I'm not what he wants
and that hurts down deep
I would take away the key he holds to my heart
but that’s a key I want him to keep.
We never had a chance
just him and I
I'm not his type
and that makes me cry.
I see something special
right inside his soul
He has this emptiness
I wish I can make whole
He has to let down that wall
and take me in
but until that happens
I have to sit back and keep him as my
best friend.
2006-07-09 17:27:54 · 18 answers · asked by Jessica 2 in Family & Relationships ➔ Friends
I think you have promise but I don't care for this poem. Please don't be upset. Art has many forms and what one person dislikes another may find amazing. Poetry is about what's inside of you. Ask yourself if you poured your heart and soul into this. If you took your time and tried as hard as you could to make it say what you wanted it to. And please...never give up. Best of luck to you!
2006-07-09 17:32:12 · answer #1 · answered by silent.peace 3 · 1⤊ 1⤋
I think it has potential. But to be honest its a little long, My advice is to shorten the poem or take out some of your best lines. Then dont make such a short line break, It breaks up the flow for the reader.
2006-07-09 17:31:21 · answer #2 · answered by adamb6767 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
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2016-11-30 23:17:52 · answer #3 · answered by ? 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
You're a good writer but you need to learn how to put things together. It's not really very organized, but good job
2006-07-09 17:32:57 · answer #4 · answered by blahblahblahblahblah 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
anybody with a screwedup relationship is going to like it but honestly in the world of good to great literature it has no place.
2006-07-09 17:36:02 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
ill give it a 10 cuz it came from the heart
2006-07-09 22:26:19 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
the poem is great it does not hit you until the very last line i give you 10
2006-07-09 17:32:05 · answer #7 · answered by ? 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Wow, that's great expressive writing! You have talent. Keep writing!
2006-07-09 17:33:00 · answer #8 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Not a bad poem, but I don't think you should be his best friend or wait. Just move on. Its' not easy, but well worth it.
2006-07-09 17:30:17 · answer #9 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
i loved it. like i can also relate to it. thats like almost exactly how i feel about my ex bf. omg! i liked it. it was awesome! awww...... i would give it 9 1/2....
2006-07-09 17:31:28 · answer #10 · answered by I Luv Joel Madden!! 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋