is this sentence correct?

Question

Hi:
can you check my sentence below because the sentence seems littlebit weird, but i dont know what is wrong. If you can change my sentence to better, please feel free to show me, but i want to keep the original meaning
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I think that the way of English class now needs to be an open class, a class where students can have open discussions with sofas, hammocks, bean bag chairs, lamps, carpet, and reclining chairs with sunshine out in the garden.
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Reply to:unfab06
No, this is just one of my essays that I am working on, and i feel little weird of this sentence, so i ask people's opinions and suggestions here

Answer 1

It sounds like the students are holding discussions with the sofas, hammocks, bean bag chairs, lamps, carpet, and reclining chairs. Are they supposed to be? Last I checked sofas and the rest weren't very responsive.

I think it would make more sense if the sentence was broken.
ie: I think that English class needs to be an open class. A class where...

From here it depends if it's possible to talk to the seats or not.

...students can have open discussions with sofas, hammocks, bean bag chairs, lamps, carpet, and reclining chairs with sunshine out in the garden.

or
...students can have open discussions while sitting on sofas, hammocks, bean bag chairs, (lamps ...see note below), carpet, and reclining chairs, in the sunshine in the garden.

note: if the students are out in the sunshine, why do they need lamps? exclude the word "lamps" if you use my suggestion for the ending of the sentence.
ALSO; just "bean bags" makes sense and is less of a mouthful than "bean bag chairs" or did you mean "bean bags, chairs"?

I'm currently studying editing and proofreading.

Answer 2

I think the way English class should
be is to be a more welcoming class. A class
where students can have open discussions
with sofas, hammocks, bean bag chairs,
lamps, carpet, and reclining chairs with
the sunshine out in the garden,and having open discussions.

Answer 3

From my point of view, English classes should be conducted as an open class, where students can have open discussions in a more comfortable environment. The lessons may be conducted comfortably with hammocks, bean bag chairs, lamps, carpet and reclining chairs with sunshine out in the garden.
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this is the best from me.

Answer 4

I think the English class needs to be conducted in an open-class manner; a class where students can have open discussions with sofas,hammocks,bean bag chairs, lamps,carpet and reclining chairs with sunshine out in the garden.

Answer 5

I think that the way of English class now needs to be an open class, a class where students can have open discussions with sofas, hammocks, bean bag chairs, lamps, carpet, and reclining chairs with sunshine out in the garden.

sofas and all that cant discuss... so ur sentence that students can have open discussions with sofas is absurd :)


I think the English class now needs to be conducted in an open-class manner, a class where students can have open discussions. This environment can be facilitated by providing sofas,hammocks,bean bag chairs, lamps,carpet and reclining chairs supplemented by ample sunshine out in the garden.

Answer 6

Do I get 10 points??

OLD WAY

I think that the way of English class now needs to be an open class, a class where students can have open discussions with sofas, hammocks, bean bag chairs, lamps, carpet, and reclining chairs with sunshine out in the garden.

CORRECTION

I think the way English class looks should be changed. It should be an open class, a class where students can have open conversations, and their sorroundings can be with with sofas, hammocks, bean bag chairs, lamps, carpet, and reclining with sunshine out in the garden.

Off Topic : Are you running for Student Council?

Answer 7

English classes should be open classes, where students can have open discussions sitting on sofas, hammocks, bean bag chairs, and reclining chairs. The room would have carpet and lamps in it, and students would be able to see the sunshine out in the garden.

That is my suggestion

Answer 8

I think the atmosphere of an english class should open, a class where students can have open discussions with sofas, hammocks, bean bag chairs, lamps, carpet, and reclining chairs with sunshine out in the garden.-----i think that sounds a little bit better

Answer 9

I think that the way of our English class needs now to be an open class, where students can have open discussions sitting comfortably on sofas, hammocks, bean bag chairs, lamps, carpet, reclining chairs and the sun shining in the garden. how's that?....by the way i keep seeing that quite a few people keep leaving "open discussions with sofas, hammocks, bean bag chairs, lamps, carpet, and reclining chairs ".....that sounds like you're talking to the sofas and such.

Answer 10

Your sentence is perfectly correct! but i am putting it in a better way!
I want to suggest some reformative measures with respect to our English Classes. This in turn would create a more reciprocative and interactive session than the present sombre one. I would suggest that the class be furnished with sofas,hammocks,bean bag chairs, lamps for brightening the class on dull days, carpets, and reclining chairs in the garden for basking in the sun during calm weather.... isnt this a bit more presentable u think?