Do you like this poem i wrote?

Question

What do you honestly think of this poem

You don't need drugs you need this. The smell of a bonfire on an Augustenvening, wearing jeans with flip flops, goning to the mall with brand new shops. Knowing that you are missed, always waiting to
get kissed. Running outside in shorts and a tee when its rainy and warmthe nervous feeling you get in a close game, running into old friends and knowing somethings don't never change. When someone notices your new hair cut, finally getting out of a rut. Singing along with the raidio and sounding good, watching fireworks with your best friend, going to a movie that is sad to see end. You see my friend you need each other to feel good, not drugs or drinks or not doing something youshould. So stay strong and don't give up

That should say August Evening. Sorry about other typos

Answer 1

I love your poem.
My favorite uncle was killed last year because of drugs.
I hate what they do to good people.
There has got to be a way to break this addiction.

Answer 2

I think Ur poem need to be relay out.Take this version and make it into a diffrent 1 by using all that u said and reward it and play with it. It well come and it well be better, I think. I'm only saying this becues I to wright poems and when they come to mined just taking them putting on paper its usually Ur true feeling and sometimes it come to fast to make it all roll together right, with all the emotion u have put into it. Plz relay it out would like to read it, on yahoo!answer.

Answer 3

I think your poem has sincerity and an honest intent, which are things that are essential and that many attempts at poetry lack. I think it needs more form in it, that is, a division into lines and stanzas, and needs more attention to grammar and spelling. I like it and would like it more after some of these things are taken care of.

Answer 4

While writing poems you allude and make a circuitous journey.
The element of rhyming should be included. Refine it.

Answer 5

You should probably study poetry a little more.

Answer 6

I think it cute

Answer 7

not good