YOU LOVE
YOU CRY
YOU DREAM
YOU HIDE
YOU WANT EVERYTHING IN UR LIFE
TIME GOES BY AND U CANT HIDE
THE TEARS THAT YOU CRIED
THE LOVE THAT DID BETRAYED YOU
AND DIDNT LET YOUR DREAMS
BECOME A PARADISE
LMAO I AM ONLY 15 AND I AM ESL SO NO COMMENTS IF ITS STUPID
2006-07-08 13:47:57 · 19 answers · asked by ♥Angel♥ 6 in Pregnancy & Parenting ➔ Adolescent
I LIVE IN CANADA TORONTO, AND I AM FROM AZERBAIJAN(NO ONE KNOWS THAT COUNTRY) LMAO
2006-07-11 06:11:38 · update #1
i love it .. listin im 15 too if u wanna talk sometimes just email me good.looking00@yahoo.com
2006-07-12 06:52:39 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
Woah them last 3 lines is powerful, shows ppl that life is 2 short to dwell on drama, nice job
2006-07-08 13:54:54 · answer #2 · answered by MisSieS 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I do not know what LMAO and ESL are but I did like your poem. Great Job!
2006-07-08 13:53:14 · answer #3 · answered by Kimmy K 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It is pretty good----follow your dreams--and you'll get better, and never listen to critism, like that girl that said my dog can write better than that---do you think her dog really can?? And anyway, words won't hurt you--what she says will only make you stronger---PERSUE YOUR DREAMS!! You regret doing something bad, but what you don't do, you'll regret more. Good Luck!
2006-07-08 14:07:13 · answer #4 · answered by la. 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I LOVE IT. ur an original its awesome. i love how u get so powerful and realistic b/cuz it shows so much reality!!! keep on writing poetry!
2006-07-08 14:33:05 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
that was fantastic! it was powerful and very meaningful! it gave me strenghth and will! you should write poems like this one more often! you have a whole lot of talent! keep it up!
2006-07-09 17:26:50 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
that's a good poem if your not in a poetry class get in one so you can became better
2006-07-08 13:52:58 · answer #7 · answered by angelhernandezjose 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
My dog wrote a better poem than that....sorry!
2006-07-08 13:59:17 · answer #8 · answered by Allison ♥ 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
its ok. kinda short but the message is good. whats ur first language?
2006-07-08 13:53:04 · answer #9 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
i love it its so good btw im 15 too
2006-07-08 14:33:34 · answer #10 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋