fairy tale eyes
search me for the answers
answers do not come
and i leave the thought undone
life seems so big
if only i could reach you
i would give you the sun
you're the only one
will i leave you undone?
i hear the question
that only i can answer
you're the only one who hears
whispers rolling from my silver tongue
i wont leave you undone.
forever now
i pull back the sheets and
greet the day with your smile
and see the world through your eyes
c'mon, it'll be fun
let's don't leave anything undone.
2006-07-08 01:56:09 · 12 answers · asked by grumpy 4 in Entertainment & Music ➔ Polls & Surveys
babe that could be an awesome song, i can imagine myself singing along to that!
did u ever consider being a song writer?
maybe u should look into that. good luck.
2006-07-08 02:00:25 · answer #1 · answered by catsup 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Sounds like a light,sweet love poem or song... Not bad, I just thought the "c'mon it'll be fun" was out of place with the language...
2006-07-08 12:28:13 · answer #2 · answered by Grimm 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I like it. The beauty of poetry is being true to yourself. Don't worry about what others think, do it because you like to express yourself in creative ways. Love to see that poetry is still being written, I thought I was the only one left!
2006-07-08 10:47:24 · answer #3 · answered by Fox Paws 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Don't listen to the haters....It does have meaning, and its beautiful. I write poetry too, but I don't think I would ever have enough courage to put it out in the public like you did.....
Maybe it could be a song too.....Thats all songs are anyways, poetry put to music....
2006-07-08 10:40:30 · answer #4 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
I loved it. It was fun and well-written.
Just one critique: The last line should be "Let's not leave anything undone" to be grammatically correct.
If you want to publish your work, go to www.fictionpress.com and sign up.
2006-07-08 09:19:39 · answer #5 · answered by AxisofOddity 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Not bad. Go to http://poetsanctuary.proboards47.com/index.cgi and sign up. Great poetry community. My sn is the same. :)
2006-07-08 09:01:56 · answer #6 · answered by armageddon1024 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
u're poems r suckS!! they don't rhyme n its meaningless. u should write something more simple but meaningful.
i got a poem ... if u wanna read it, contact me.
2006-07-08 09:01:44 · answer #7 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
good poem. i agree with bexy id see myself sing along to that.
2006-07-08 09:15:03 · answer #8 · answered by Velvet Rain Drops 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Not bad
2006-07-08 09:00:56 · answer #9 · answered by Mr. Clean 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
ah-mazing
2006-07-08 13:19:34 · answer #10 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋