My number one
All my life I’ve waited
Floating, dreaming, wishing
For the day when you would come my way
That day has come
My heart flutters at the sound of your voice
My hands shake as I reach to touch your face
In heaven there can only be a better place
Soaring through the clouds
The wind beating at my skin
Breathing heavy, feeling numb
You’re all I need, my number one
Tears stream down my face, burning my eyes
Happy tears, thankful smiles
Knowing I can hold you, embrace you
Fearless of the unknown, content with life
No longer will I feel the sharpened knife
Of hurt, pain and suffering
2006-07-07 07:19:50 · 35 answers · asked by Chambo25 2 in Beauty & Style ➔ Skin & Body
10
2006-07-07 17:59:15 · answer #1 · answered by Xxx☆pjay☆xxX 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
4
2006-07-07 07:23:12 · answer #2 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
7
2006-07-07 07:23:13 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
I'll give it a 8 only because it got redundant at the end Hurt,Pain and Suffering Change Suffering to Betrayel or something like that.
2006-07-07 07:43:21 · answer #4 · answered by Dawn R 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I'm not trying to be mean, but I'd give it a 2 at best.
The part about the tears is the worst.
2006-07-07 07:23:43 · answer #5 · answered by someone,somewhere 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
not undesirable, in my opinion Im keen on somewhat rhyme and rhythm and that i concept this lacked those a tiny bit. i think like this can be became right into a narrative really a lot, yet I did like the imagery, very astounding imagery. I provide it a 7 :]
2016-11-01 09:28:19 · answer #6 · answered by ? 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Nice Poem I would give it an 8
2006-07-07 07:24:59 · answer #7 · answered by girlstimes2 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
That was sappy. Very, very, sappy. Oh, and by the way, it was definetly an 8. By the way, that 8 is not a compliment. Weirdo.
2006-07-07 07:26:16 · answer #8 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
wow.nice poem. shows a LOT of emotion 9 1/2
2006-07-07 07:46:40 · answer #9 · answered by ~~j-u-mp-y~~ 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Oh, I'd say around an 8. Other people have called it sappy, but I guess I like sappy, lol.
2006-07-07 07:26:47 · answer #10 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋