When you love someone so deep inside,
It seems like it’s so easy to hide,
You’ve loved him for so very long,
You would think he could do no wrong.
Every day you would hope and pray,
That he would always stay this way,
He treated you like you should be treated,
You thought your life was finally completed.
One night he was so sweet to you,
You thought all those thing were maybe untrue,
Two days later he was back the same,
You thought you were the one to blame.
You thought that you would marry him someday,
But this time god wanted to get his way,
You wanted things back how they were before,
But you know this couldn’t happen anymore.
It was Saturday night about ten o’clock,
You heard the news and it wasn’t a shock,
You knew this was going to happen soon,
As you laid there and cried in the pale lit moon.
2006-07-07 07:19:33 · 4 answers · asked by Anonymous in Entertainment & Music ➔ Other - Entertainment
no i'm not kidding
2006-07-07 07:48:35 · update #1
That's a Lulu! Lulu;) LOL Keep on writing Lulu, and I don't doubt that someday future poets will be striving to earn a "Lulu Award" for composing the best poem of the year:)
2006-07-07 07:26:10 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 2⤊ 5⤋
I think that it's a really good poem with lots of hurt feelings behind it. The way you wrote it was beautilful, but I don't think you should force the end rhymes. Good luck with everything!
2006-07-07 14:27:06 · answer #2 · answered by Sparkles 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I like it. Soft and flowing. There is beauty in pain...
2006-07-07 14:25:28 · answer #3 · answered by bsmt21 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Are you kidding? You guys are all kidding, right?
2006-07-07 14:40:56 · answer #4 · answered by double0negitive 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋